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09-30-04, 05:23 PM
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war aint a good thing ..... check it
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im bout to spit the truth
sit back and watch how he kills our youth how many parents gotta hear in a letter their son is dead you the one that pumped them full with lead they was hopin to get money for an education all u left was cryin parents hopin for the kids reincarnation the kid was cryin on the phone he didn't wanna die in a war zone only fear was runnin trough his head youngsta was sure this ment to be his death i saw it up the new mothers were prayin "dear lord save our baby" all they seen was dark rain fight for your country now u ready to give away your life what gone happen to his son , the lil one passed the age of five what the meaning of war , we killin ourselfs the human rase whoever started shit , remember hes a big disgrase
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09-30-04, 05:30 PM
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deep! i like this sort of reality shit. this is a real issue. You could of got more tech with it and expanded a bit. but you had some allright point's in this. Flow is off in spot's because you stretched the line's. You have some nice rhyme's in it... good drop ...keep elevating..pz
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09-30-04, 05:33 PM
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IP:
ty bruh
am writin stuff like this for only a few days uppin ..........
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09-30-04, 06:45 PM
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IP:
best lines:
only fear was runnin trough his head youngsta was sure this ment to be his death i saw it up the new mothers were prayin "dear lord save our baby" all they seen was dark rain ^^i really liked this poem very nice.. good job...... ~Lady Fiya~ peep my links my collab with anxiety and L.I. or my battles, aight pz
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