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10-06-04, 04:20 PM
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homeless...
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struck down wiv diseases yet still seases the moment...
to the eye he pleases but still freezes like an aunament... battle for food like a tournament that plays on the mind... chewin on bacon rind yet wen asked he says hes dined... abused as a child, scars from youth all that mark his birth... it hurts to think a shoppin trolley holds everything hes worth... some question his determination to search 4 an occupation... but any attempt gets pushed aside without any notification... so continuation of a struggle...that is his life thats a muddle... no mother to cuddle...to keep warm has a blanket to huddle... baths in a puddle of dirt...n hibination? this kids an expert... exerts fear into strangers...the looks of disgust must hurt... some days he'll take...time to think put his life on a plate... contemplatin suicide n doesn't want to wait, sets a date... n just as he believes its fate.....he rolls over and wakes.... ..............chill out y'all it was just a dream for fuck sake.... 15 mins work...holla wiv feedback...
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10-07-04, 01:25 AM
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You Love My Style.
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I like this piece transitions are well used. am feelin it is story tellin this would sound good in audio.
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10-07-04, 01:34 AM
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damn i thought this was a rhyme about class-sic lol
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10-07-04, 11:10 AM
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Dayum nice drop sum real dope rhyming in that sum good multies in that liked the ending...all of it was a dream kinda like Dynasty lol...anyway good drop fella...hit ma SinnerBitch link in my sig props...
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10-07-04, 12:21 PM
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GoD LiKe
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This was dope
good from begining to end nice use of vocab and flow..... 8-10 hit up any of mine below They dope
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10-07-04, 12:52 PM
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Banned: Biting
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this was an okay peice, you had some good use of vocabulary
and decent flow, though i feel that you could of used a little bit more explanation in proving your point this was a decent. i give you a 6.5/10 pz |
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10-07-04, 01:11 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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this was a well put together drop, good flow and vocabulary, stayed on point from beginning to end, keep dropping.......1
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10-08-04, 01:50 PM
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o.k uppin more feedback n i did mean it wen i sed 15 mins..........
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