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W.A.R
I got flesh on my flesh/ intense with eyes open to the mess/ open to war and shots fired/ im open flesh lookin for retirement/ catch view of the sanity/ reality hit harder then a bullet inside of me/ thoughts alive with fear hiddin to survive/ body in motion with a full metal jacket/ color of green the money of schemes/ they send us out cause they see money as a win/ im a born killa in sin/ cant lock off unlock the locks off/ im left a numba lost/ in this war holocaust/ and how much it cost/ for me to enter and move forth/ an army of one/ im the general and my recruit is my gun/ I sleep awake an alert/ affairs with my nightmares as my only flirt/ enemies is the remedy to lettin my breath/ many of these memories are meant to seen/ put struggle in front of hope/ and il drop hopin hope hopefully loads its hold/ and stands under pressure loaded and doesnt unload/ cause if not im right behind it pussin it forth/ standin up cause iv standed enough/ with rough edges I stand to the tip/ and throw myself off head first/ into this verse/ |
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like the imagery and wordplay, good emotion also. stylistically some of the lines need playing with, like the flow and rhyme aint always what they could be. all the same, i was definitely feeling it. i'd say... 7/10.
return the favour and check out my "fulcrum shift" piece if you get the chance. peace!
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yo thanks uppint this for feed back now dont sleep yall
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