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10-14-04, 03:32 PM
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*Darkness*
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Ascending voices echo like a whale’s song in rhyme I’m trapped inner mind, a capsule that’s lost in time I don’t know why this void confronts me to this end But I pretend to continue with life in order for a mend Send angels for me I can’t live in this darkness anymore Before I was free with aspirations now locked behind a door A sore on my family’s branch, the bark of my existence I wish I was dead, doctor ignore my family’s persistence Your resistance to let me go has prolonged my agony further Imagine me in heaven looking down on you with our holy father You think that I live but realistically you’re just preserving me Free me from this body you can remember me how I use to be Please awake,.. It’s been two years, I know you can hear this Can you feel me twist your wrist, please get out of this abyss Your missed, mum wants you to come home when this is over Let me fix your cover, Morgan found you a Four-Leaf clover I feel this is my all fault, so please forgive me for the accident All this wasn’t my intention you can’t be heaven’s next resident How can you sit there, knowing full well what you done When the clips where discharge you didn’t tell me to run funny you didn’t say I could end up dead, bullet to the head I was mislead instead, now I’m dormant on a hospital bed Slit the bread you said, no reference to the feds being lead Informed I swear they said, you wanted a piece but got my head Forget this world, I should have gone to the light when it called So now I walk thought limbo waiting for heaven to call, but I fall Into the sub terrains of hell, lost sprits roam, lost in the devils home The tones of pain call for the throne, bang* stake thought my dome I wish I was at home, repent my sins now I roam for fresh souls To own, So I can get back home by paying the Grim Reaper tolls |
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10-14-04, 04:29 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP:
wow, this is a great verse, beautiful imagery in your words, well structured and written, good vocabulary and flow,,nice job on this......1
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10-15-04, 07:17 AM
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Black Poet
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IP:
Thanks alot Fluid up~ing for more feedback please...
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10-15-04, 11:07 AM
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E-Style, Bitch.
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IP:
damn homeboy
dope peice, nice mix of good vocab an simple yet effective lines, nice creativity an kickass wordplay 9/10.. keep em comin my nigguh..
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10-15-04, 01:48 PM
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Black Poet
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IP:
Thanx Dope up~ing for more feedback,..
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10-16-04, 06:41 AM
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Black Poet
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IP:
Up~ing,,.... For feedback,.
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10-16-04, 07:01 AM
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Light Weight
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IP:
diz wuz ok i lyked da flow
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10-16-04, 07:23 AM
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Black Poet
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IP:
Thanks man..
Peace. |
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10-16-04, 07:33 AM
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Welcome 2 Dope South
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IP:
Nice Drop Cuz. Keep Doin Yo Damn Thing
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10-18-04, 07:38 AM
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Black Poet
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IP:
Sup people up~ing this,...
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10-18-04, 09:19 AM
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New to RV
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IP:
Good piece man, i like this shit it was interesting, stay up bro
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10-19-04, 07:25 AM
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Black Poet
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IP:
Thanks a lot for the feedback all,
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10-19-04, 07:34 AM
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Hates Fucking Idiots
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IP:
DAyum dayum dayum this was most def a nice piece of work there major props to ya work CriTiC 9.5/10
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10-20-04, 08:10 AM
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Black Poet
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IP:
Thanks for the feedback man^ up~ing
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10-22-04, 08:43 AM
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Black Poet
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IP:
Uping for more feedback please,,...
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