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***cITYSLICka***
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they said da' sun would shine so bright in my sky
da tit's blindin' my eyes to da grime in these guys they lied they didnt recognize the powers of wise minds and never imagined the depths of the power in mine hopin' i'd fall victim to the demons inside since i was 'bout eight or nine Gods been sendin' me signs on how to tacticly manuever b'hine enemy lines gave me blue prints of their mental d'zines in all men we find our most prevalent weakness is pride we scheme,scam,& conive even when the innocent die consequence of da' jive from it,we can't hide can we escape our destiny of brimestone and fire and successfully rest in piece through my troubles this piece was inspired meant to express the relation of pain to the only emcee that i really admire hopin' it'll lessen her stress when rains feel my loves,hates,and desires straight from heart it remains never give up on the struggles don't ever be discouraged by lames and ma' we're all born to die dat's somthin' thats never gon' change *****every time you're down remember the first four letters of my name. in every thing there's something good and something bad.search the good in every bad that comes your way and never forget that you already know the answers to all your questions you just have to search your soul and dig em out.
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dat was a good piece...didnt realize u were dis good..damn boi!! but newayz i mean u can work on da flow a lil bit but otha than dat..good 1...10/10
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GoD LiKe
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Yeah def , foer a newb you got potential.....
I mean work on the strucutre a lil biut and maybe up ya vocab and user words with more imagry but other than that tight drop 8-10 keep dropping and go peep out the poetry forum , mad dope shit in there
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***cITYSLICka***
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good lookin out for the advice Ice.Lil C i got much luv for u baby stay up.
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IP:
YO, tht was gd very fluent . u remind me of kanye west
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IP:
very well said just work on the structure a bit so your lines want be to short
8-10
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***cITYSLICka***
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IP:
thx 4 da feed back.
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Straight Hustla.
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IP:
I felt this it was decent.. 6/10.
You got some potential just need to elevate.. Peace.
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IP:
yo dat shit was pretty dope man...
i was definately feelin da flow and wordplay... only thing is like my man said.. longer lines and u be str8... u still get dat 10/10 tho |
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***cITYSLICka***
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good looks on da feedbak.thx.keep em comin'.
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