a little something i wrote about the world coming to an end.


i dream of pyramids that peirce through the sky/
splite open the universe witness galaxies collide/

watch continents crumble and get swollowed by the seas/
stars erupt like volcano's, the earth bleeds/

watch the clouds splite apart and the sun melt whats left/
the ocean boils with tempatures that leaves the god of the seas impressed/

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dream of pyramids that peirce through the sky/
splite open the universe witness galaxies collide/
^^^^^^^^^^^^^ NICE FLOW RIGHT THERE WORDS TOO BASIC THOUGH ELEVATE USING VOCAB








watch continents crumble and get swollowed by the seas/
stars erupt like volcano's, the earth bleeds/
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ YA LINES A LIL STRETCH ITS MESSING UP DA FLOW U NEED TO GET MORE CREATIVE WITH THIS PIECE GET MORE IMAGINARY,,,,,,WORK ON VOCAB TOO












atch the clouds splite apart and the sun melt whats left/
the ocean boils with tempatures that leaves the god of the seas impressed/
^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ERM AGAIN TOO STRETCH LENGTH YA LINES MAKE IT SHORT

GET BETTA WITH VOCAB MAYNE

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thanks bk,for the info, lets hear some more yyyyyyyyeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaa

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Ghetto Cripple Can Ya Put An Feedback In My Open Mic

The Death Night P.2...........plz..........word I'll Preciated Since I Put An Feedback On Yours

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yea for sure, this is how i do it, im'a try to get more on this open mic shit.

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lets get some feed back on the creativity and shit. wat ya'll think.

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lets stop dazzin, lets hear it, rate this shit for real.

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halla at this shit ya'll lets get it crackin up in this shizzle.lol

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