i dont care wat people say cause im confident,
and i dont care wat they think,cause to me it's a compliment,
im tired of people rappin when they flow is symplistic,
tryin to act tight when they low as LIMP BIZKIT,
they mad cause i got four "15's" in da bac of da trunk ,
hatin cause every where i go u can feel da bump,
they juss no it's so nice,and now they gotta have dis,
eye's so blinded they dont think bout da savage,
every where i go they do wat i want,and the gurls promise me,
they all treat me wit respect like a prophecy,
u no all my gurl they all real nice and none of them is grody,
but u should see da sh!t dat da gurls show me,
cause u no im on da stage as i spit dis verse,
u doin kinda good but ya skill is worse,

dis is ya boy JJ straight from stl..lol..dats how i do

need elevation bad stucture keep it up tho..

ey y'all give me some feed bac
dat was my first post tell me wat y'all think bout it

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hmm...it was decent for a first-ever-rap on this site...but dawg we from STL...YOU GOTTA REP IT BETTA THAN THAT DAWG!!! Come on homie!! Keep it up dawg...you'll get there soon homeboy...holla...1

yo man i no i got betta i was juss spittin for my first one
but thanx for da advice homie.holla

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The piece wasn't all that elevated but it was decent. Could've come a lot more creative, used multies to crisp the flow, and used a bit more vocab. Peace stay movin!

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great new comer shit but bad as a pro shit

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Wasnt that bad... I guess...... Good Verse tho...

Peace out~

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Ill Emcee

ya vocab needs to elevate i give u a 4/10 fix ya structure too