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11-14-04, 05:01 PM
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I'm Back HOEBAG
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Plz Give Me SOme Feedback
IP:
THis is my new song right here...i'mma be recording it soon....
Chorus Blowing up justa get respect Blowing up to Get intellect Blowing up without tha nines or tecs THATS SUM CRAZY CRAZY SHIT said yo man ya'll betta check this And on the mic i'm highly respected I'm blowin up now so i'm highly protected Since i'm rising to the top ur all neglecting The fact that i'm blowin up and gettin big Got better in 3 months...damn thats quick Growin up now i got myself a click Blowin past ya'll like Michael Vick Blowin past ya'll like i just shifted to 5th Hows a mc's intellegence sposed ta grow And how a flows justa a flow And how a hoes justa a hoe And how i be hustlin and gettin that dough Fuck man i guess thats just the way it goes Chorus-Blowing up justa get respect Blowing up to Get intellect Blowing up without tha nines or tecs THATS SUM CRAZY CRAZY SHIT Shiften from 1rst to 5th In a matter of seconds ya'll lives will be coming to an ending And you know i'm not prentending Now that i got money to be spending And i got the money to be lending I guess i'll be like a fuckin money tree now but i guess thats how lifes sposed to be now Leavin my family tickets to be in the crowd My real dream was to just make my Family Proud Cuz it seems like most the time i just lettum down But just to see that frown get turned upside down That'd take the tears outta my eyes for once Just to know that my life long goal is done
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11-14-04, 05:08 PM
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.Retro-Bution.
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IP:
Bit Too Basic......But it's alright...Improve your Wordplay a bit..That is all..
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11-14-04, 05:08 PM
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IP:
hmmmmmmmmmmmm
this was ight...you couldve worked on your wordplay and your multis more had good structure...but that isnt enuff....nice try tho 5/10 you got some feedback...now return tha favor http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=160141 stay up 1~~~~~~~~~
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11-14-04, 05:19 PM
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.Retro-Bution.
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IP:
Infector return some feedback...
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11-14-04, 07:15 PM
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Sam Dope
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IP:
not too good...way too simple...try coming a lil more complex and lenghthining your bars next time...also, work on that chorus...1
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11-14-04, 08:19 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP:
i wasnt really feelin this one...the structure was messed up...and it was a little basic...but i see hella potential...keep at it and u'll get it fo sho...~1~
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