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Old 12-14-04, 03:07 PM   #1
Lil C
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Dementia

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Silent screams shattered
dreams. Alone in the dark,
schizophrenia. Oldness settles
Each wrinkle a lesson learned.
Empty hallways, painted windows,
A story on each wall. Six
am. Each rain drop accounted
for. Dusty hands, dirty feet
and sun kissed scalps. A
scary feeling on the intercom.
Dogs bite as keys rattle, being
free; He who laughs last.
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Old 12-14-04, 04:42 PM   #2
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Very nice. Short but nice. I like the line structure you used.

Now if you would return the favor.
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Old 12-15-04, 01:28 PM   #3
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thanx, will return da favor....uppin
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