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12-18-04, 03:20 AM | #1 | |
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Chains ~ Adamant & Bloomquist
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Adamant ~
Nothing is impossible, because we all have something and to say you lost the will just builds the cost of wondering what becomes of the days when erased of all their purpose submersed in chains they lay in wait afraid to change fate’s version to shake em it takes a person...who’s able to look not just see that the situation is escapable, capable the few who believe in themselves it can be helped don’t tell ME it can’t be done I’ve failed but my head I held, up signifying the pride I’d won yes life does drive one crazy on a crash course through the maybes so don’t slow down keep your speed grab the keys and break free take deep breathes and make the best of what these tests can teach forget neglect you’ll get respect yet don’t expect to reach it in one step, take your time, work out all the kinks survey closely all that binds make your mind and think climb the brink to the other side as the lines wind in sync n you’ll find once the ink has dried, signs'll provide the missing link Bloom~ Keep your chin up, for struggles endlessly ply through your days and cast shadows upon your friends and take the pride that you've raised as I flow through the haze, poetically inspiring young adolescent goals to reform their given up souls, to stand alone and take control rusted chains bound you from the truth you always yearn to learn and return rugged facts in life as opinionated thoughts re-occur I spit through the blur, poetically turning the flourishing youth applying to dying with truth buried in dark coffins they choose indolently swimming through endless sea's of metallic ropes as they choke and revoke my people and flow slow without woes throughout anything you undergo, keep striving your feet through the chains for pain can only last so long, as poetry keeps your reality sane chains tied my people as slaves for centuries throughout the past but the present is the future to a corrupted man who can't last I grind through the metal, day by day, and link by link, and free my fellow man from these catastrophic defeats will endless chains bind my figure to these blood written scriptures? And tear away my ruthless mind from my family and baby pictures? Keep looking straight, never to the ground, stick to your goals and to your plans for chains can only hold you back, if you are in reach of your God's hands…
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12-18-04, 03:28 AM | #2 | |
Banned: Biting
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IP:
Nice Piece Both Yall I Was Feeling The Vocabulary It Was Decent,Structure Was Kind Of Decent, Flow Was Of The Tip Of My TOunge I Could Just Flow It Werdddd....9/10
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12-19-04, 06:55 PM | #3 | |
Flyweight
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IP:
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12-20-04, 12:13 PM | #4 | |
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This Was One Of The Best Piece's Iv'e Seen In a While, Was Simple,Basic But Got Your Point's Across Good, Imagry Was Also Good, But The Thing That Make's It So Good Is That The Vocab Wasn't Too Advanced, Specially For Peep's Of Your Calibur's Which Is Good Cos' This Piece Came Thru Strong..You Should Of Put The Structure In Center Format, Much Easier o Follow, Only Because Some Line's Were Uneven But A Very Nice Piece, 8/10 Rtf In One Of The OM's In My Sig, If You Have Time.
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06-22-05, 07:46 PM | #5 | ||
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IP:
yo i like that piece alot. vocab was brilliant and had me really thinken ....keep it up man
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