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07-15-02, 02:48 PM | #1 | |
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-h£ñ & ñØw
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It used ta be that when i asked u, u promised u would call//
U also said i was your everything, and to me u'd give your all// Well that was then and this iz now and baby its all changed// I started thinking, no longer dreaming and got my attitude rearranged// It used ta be i'd say things like "i'll be you Superwoman if u just gimme a Lil Mo// If you commit yourself to me, my love will erupt like an endless volcano"// Well that was then and this iz now and im not afraid to hurt you// I deserve to be treated better after all you've put me thru// But that's not the end, ladies and gentlemen, of this story i do tell// For that was the "Then" and this iz tha "Now" which actually turns out quite well// After our big fight, late that night i thought i actually got thru to u// I thought "Well if i yell summore, you'll think 'Oh god, what have i done, what did i do?// And maybe he'll figure it out, without a doubt, that his love he did not show// And from now on, he'll be more conscience of what then, he did not know// And despite his fake lies, i've come to realize, his priorities he did arrange// And for me, his love, his best friend, he decided he would change// Even tho he was scared, not wanted a broken heart to be repaired, his love he did not withdrawal// For he knew my love for him and his for mine was true and together, in love, we would fall// yo-if u noticed, the second half of my poem i went backwards wit da rhyming sound at tha end from "oo" to "oh" to "-ange" to "all" its like a reflection of da first part b/c it starts out wit "all" and ends wit "oo"--i did dat b/c it reflects my situation in dis poem--theres more but i'll just leave u wit dat. |
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07-15-02, 06:20 PM | #2 | |
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stop sleepin e'ery1!!!!!!!!
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07-15-02, 08:17 PM | #3 | |
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man fuck all u non-readers!!! ya'll be sleepin too damn much!!
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07-15-02, 08:42 PM | #4 | |
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dang..i know where your coming from with this...but i haven't fought with my baby yet..fortunately....haha...nah this was a good piece...i really liked it....always elevate..much luv..God bless..1..
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07-16-02, 04:01 AM | #5 | |
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was feelin this. all the mechanics were there too. all around good peice. stay up.
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07-16-02, 10:34 AM | #6 | |
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Hey baby gurl, this was a madd powerful peice... I know fo sho if he read this he would realize what he's done & that he's not innocent ( but I've known that for a long time) I like the way yo rhymin scheme reflected the feelin & flow of the peice & fo all y'all out there who don't know, RB is messin up my girl's Sn so the previous posts are from her.keep 'em commin boo!
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07-17-02, 12:50 PM | #7 | |
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..OMG!!...tha fukkin' flo' was mo' on key...this was definetly ya best post so far...lots of emotion....(see wut happens when u put ur mind to it!)
Fav line:"It used ta be i'd say things like "i'll be you Superwoman if u just gimme a Lil Mo//" ^^dats pretty dope...u elevatin' a lot.... pizzle n' pieces!! |
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07-22-02, 10:10 AM | #8 | |
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....uppin' fuh' peeps...^^^
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07-23-02, 10:38 AM | #9 | |
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had a solid structure...'flowed' well...and had pure emotions which were most definetly felt...depicted well....
..respect... |
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07-26-02, 07:24 AM | #10 | |
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Dang Gurl ...
I can relate to dis on da real ... Much props, U mos def elevatin, keep doin ur thang! Pz ~1~ |
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