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Old 01-13-05, 11:10 PM   #1
50hater_killer
Knock out kings fur life
 
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From: ky
topical ( witnessing a drive by)

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I saw it all with my own two eyes,
I saw the bullets punch as they slied.
People ducking and covering for their lives.
But all I do is watch in fear as they all die,
Smoke and blood is heard in the night.
But all I know is that this is nothing but a fight,
Not between me or society,
but between me and those who I hate,
So as I grasp my mm's and get ready to hook my bate.
I can not take anything more then a simple defeat,
so if ur gonna fuck in da hood,
u best be prepared to be takin from where you stood.
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Old 01-14-05, 11:34 AM   #3
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LOOK I ENJOYED THIS PIECE PLEASE GIVE ME SOME FEEDBACK

I try rule the hot block but some fool shot a glock// now got to duck my head or get struck by lead// but I dived fly just to survive a drive by// note I now tote a snub nose just to stay above those// that shoot rounds and pollute grounds// with shell casings
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Old 01-14-05, 03:55 PM   #4
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I try rule the hot block but some fool shot a glock// now got to duck my head or get struck by lead//

I liked urs a lil that was the top two I enjoyed the others I think you could work on homes.
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Old 01-14-05, 06:59 PM   #5
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ok feedback only please. peace
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Old 01-14-05, 07:18 PM   #6
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definately can use some elevation.....this was an ok piece.....6/10 you can use elevation tho.....you'll g et better....i used to really suck so don't feel bad lol....check my first post on this site....it was wack lmao but keep elevatin
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