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				Hells Fire Vs. ~Babylon~
			 
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		Check in's due before tuesday 12 A.M. Pacific Time Verses Due before friday 12 A.M. Pacific Time Line Limit: 20-50 Lines Max First to 3 votes win 3-0 = KO You must vote in 2 other battles or you will not continue on into the next round. Topic: Uneeded Attention 
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			 ~Lyrical Nirvana~ 
			
		
			
				
			
			
			
 
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		check........................ 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			
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		checkin in this is suppose to be my battle as Hells Fire we get an extention so i can drop tonight/tomorrow and so he has time to drop 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			
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			 C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos 
			
		
			
				
			
			
			
 
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		just drop a verse, if he doens't drop then he looses 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			
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		sorry about the structure im tired as hell and missed the italics and centerin 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			I will edit the structure if you want me to. Px 
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		cant C a babylon drop and ots past extended time limit.... 
		
	
		
		
		
		
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			 ~Lyrical Nirvana~ 
			
		
			
				
			
			
			
 
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		its not past time limit we got an extintion........... 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			
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		"The Drive - uneeded attention" 
. . . . . . . . . . eyes starin' hard, in the distance glarin' a far who apparently are, very aware of my car I tightly grip the wheal, then slightly rip and peal tires skid on concrete, and still theres eyes I feal penitrating my mind, anger, tempting at time feeling sentimental, eyes water, venting is fine I reach a stop light, the eyes, wish i could stop sight guy throws a drink, but theres a cop to stop a fight I love to be alive, but i hate life, for the buggy i drive little peice of shit, I mean it even smells muggy and dry its either green or teal, ugly and ubseen for real the green is ill, when I bought it sorta seem to apeal . . . . . . . its cold how they just stood there and wouldnt pass they just made fun, even a lil' old woman sat and laughed this peice of trash, the stick stuck, the engine shut down I must now, bust out, cuz the car door is stuck now they start throwing things again, their guilty as sin cars looking more silly then, with a more filthier trend soon their throwing bottles of snapple, and old rotten apples I'm caught in a grapple, someone stop these lil' assholes I break through the window, mad by at least ten fold I see back of car, and think why I have such bastard ken folk cuz I see a stupid sign that says, "Fuck me for real yo" I'm gonna kill these sicko's.............. ...........I mean they even pasted some fake tits and a dildo . . . . . . . . . . . . . . ~Babz~ Structure edited at Babylon's request. Px 
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		Hells Fire: You need to work on your topicals. They make sense, but barely. Internal rhymes were aight, but overall lacking in what I consider a topical. Vocab was ok, but it makes your topical too complicated. Flow was off a lot. Work on your spelling too. 5/10 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			Babylon: I couldn't help but laugh when I read this. Overall, I like how you twisted the topic, and your flow was down. Overall, work on writing more complex and in depth verses, you have 50 lines. 7/10 v/~Babylon~ 
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		I'll drop a vote tomorrow... Too drunk right now... 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
	
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		~Babylon~ I know you voted on some battles, but I need you to drop your links. All finished topicals are in the sub forum, so please go find them, and post them, or else I have to DQ you. 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			
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		http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=174589 
		
	
		
		
		
		
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		Thanks.......px 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			
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		Hells fire... You were dope in the league, and this was actaully pretty whack... You needed to delve deeper in the topic... I felt your verse was pretty bland... Cmon dog, i know you got dis... 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
	
	Unexpected shit... You always come dop dog... I was feelin this verse... But mainly, i vote for you cause fire came whack.  | 
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