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02-09-05, 11:57 AM
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my dad - moment of death ..real story
IP:
this woz a spit again from last year.....wen i wen jus started mc'in......is dedicated to ma dad..........an da moment wen he woz about to die...,im not showin off anythin, jus thort i'd share dis wid ya
(real story) ... iz a mini rap I seen all the pain since i was four When my father was rushed into the hospital door One more hour to live and fight death While my father was out of brethe All the stress caused his nerve to explode Like a revolver gun after you reload All his life flashed before his eyes While hearin the sound of our pleadin cry Still compeatin for the chance to live What more could he do, What more could he give Workin 17 hours a week, 365 a year To support us, like each strand of hair The docter sayin everythinz ok All ya need is some medicine today But now look !, it turned out like this Father die'in while wer all cryin But one question saved his whole life How woz i gunna support ma kids an ma wife? He woke up really quik, death woz passin- tik tik He cryed were is my wife? were is ma kids? While we wiped the tears from our eye lids Ran as fast as we cud jus to reach the room Nuffin but a bed, Freezin cold like a tomb "Let me leave with ma kids an ma wife" After surviving, woz disabled for life |
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02-10-05, 03:56 PM
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IP:
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02-10-05, 04:48 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP:
man i liekd this i was really feeling this
very good job keep elavating 9.5/10 |
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02-10-05, 07:36 PM
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IP:
this was coo i didnt really catch the rhyme but the emotion was there and i kno that sometimes its hard to catch a flow or a rhyme when you reading something. I wish it woulda been a lil longer
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02-11-05, 04:32 AM
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IP:
tnx , no sweat...........tnxx
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02-11-05, 04:34 AM
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IP:
by da way wus coo?
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02-11-05, 02:22 PM
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FuCk YoU I RhYme BeTtEr
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IP:
yeah i am feeling that...srry about your pops girl...you showed good emotion...the rhyme scheme was off but it all went together well...you should make it longer and add a chorous and record that shit ma...holla back...1
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"I didnt choose this life, this life chose me" EveryDay Its the same old song, and the feeling is always gone
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02-12-05, 04:53 AM
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IP:
sfe, nah is ok...........shit happens
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