nice lil intro liek the painos and guitar sample sound familar...beats good...multis r good, flow is kinda stiff word on making your flow smoother (try using alliterations) could use better and more punch lines and metas and similies..delivery seems slightly forced not natural delivery needs work production is ok could come up

Beat at the intro is horrible but becomes pretty good after it finally gets going. Lyrics are on, flow is solid. Needs some cadence. Sounds liek you recorded this 2 bars at a time. The line you say "shhhh...just open your mind" some echo on "mind" woulda added some much needed ambience to this track. This flow reminds me of Dre's flow when Korrupt was ghosting for him. The portion of the rhyme where you mention something about grinding fine bones is VERY much like "Tephlon" who is nice as hell. If you can get a hold of some of his tracks (usually works with MOP) listen to him and see how he uses his vocal range.

Second verse is much like the first as far as lyrics. Has a pseudo-morbid concept to it which worked out okay. I think more cadence woulda killed it. Kinda reminds me of a calm Jus Allah.

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Oh, BTW - if you can get any "Holocaust" tracks like " Silkworm" (I have it saved if you need it. Hit me) - man, listen to it repeatedly. Dude is a monster and you remind me of him a bit - just less cadence and aggression.

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beat is weird..... i unno i like the string and piano....... but theres a really bad break and abrupt change in it in the intro, w/e...... decent quality, u got nice multis and flow... decent track, might wanna fix up the beat alil, but its aight, ur flow is good and nice multies, but i dont get the message that well i guess..... its decent, maybe i juss didnt catch it...

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Yea Dooms..I Wish I Knew How To Do All That Stuff You Said, I'm Not Well At Producing. I Do The Basics and Shit Like That.

But Yea, I Wouldn't Mind Listening To Those Tracks, If They Have Similar Styles...A Lot Of Peeps From The Site I'm On Said I Remind Them Of The Rapper From Gorillaz.

For Fux I Dunno If You Finished Listening but Even If You Did...The Whole Thing Was Explaining A Demon Who Is Describing To You What He Does, and The Last Verse Switches Up With Me Telling The Person...

Last Bar:
"Close Your Eyes and Sing Along, As I Eat Your Internals..
I'ma Evil Demon..and I Can Make You Eternal.."

So I Entitled It "Verbal Sucide" Because If The Listener Sings Along I Take Over Their Soul and They Become An Eternal Demon.

Thanks For The Feedback From All of You. I Hope You Enjoyed This Track.

~R~

yea i dont really like this ...i mean its not my cup of tea and here's why...i dont really like your voice its not really appealing...your flow is str8 nahmean clarity in some of your words could be better ..sounds like your slurring alot wit your words..lyrics from what i can understand are onpoint feeling some of your multis wordplay isnt bad... umm overall this was solid ..work on your clarity thats my only complaint emotion is str8 delivery is str8 lyrics are good just the clarity..props

ps u can hear the queing in your flow...where u stopped and started again work on that and that eternalllll sounded really homo lol(no hate)

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aight flow was ok...lyrics were coo...yea you do have a problem getting some of your words out so yea clarity does need some work...delivery is ok...ithink it could be upped tho....overall this track was ok...peace

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u definately came up since before but the flow needs a bit off work you need to slice threw the beat not step around it roll that shit off ya tounge man all in all you definately came up holla at my nitrogen diss keep it up

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wow.....R -Rated....

Im happily suprised....
What were u drinkin while u been away? I want some....8/10.

An Im the guy that knocks everyone.

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Yo nice join man, Flow was good, some of the words kinda felt Forced, quality was Aight.. It was good thought, lyrics were tight.. good shit..

8.5/10

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Thanks For The Feedback From All..I Appreciate It All.

I Will Return The Favors Tomorrow When I Have Time.

Hit Me Up For Collaborations or Nething In That Sort.

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yea, pretty nice, but i hope you dont want to go big with your R-Rated Name
because theres already an R-Rated in the hip hop Scene

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Yea His Name Is Actually "Rated-R"

But R-Rated Is Just A Name for The Net...If I Ever Got The Chance To Go Big I Would Definitly Change My Name..

Thanks For The Feedback Though Pimpin..Stay Up.

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