I woke up, in a daze - looked around at my surroundings
I was amazed 'cause what I found was so astounding
Seemed like just moments ago i was bein eviscerated
Now I am laying at what seems to be Heavon's Gates, it
Got me fascinated seing all the late - musics greatest
B.I.G, Pac, Jam Master Jay even Marvin Gaye's here
No more beef just sippen Hennessey n' gettin blazed here
Young ones play here with out fear there is no terrorism,
gang bangers or crooked cops tryna put they ass in prison
Circles formin around Old Men preachin their life learnt wisdom
No racism - I see skinheads sittin back with Black Panthers
The meaning of life? - Yea, Bein here taught me the answer
We live in suffering on earth so man's sins are forgivin
We have to earn coming here when we done our time livin
God had this all planned so we can sit at his right hand
And help him command the earth untill judgement day lands

that was pretty rushed....take it how u wanna

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PEACE

sorry didnt know u needed a link, here'd is...

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2072459

pretty good...i got tha imagery u was sendin...flow/structure and vocab was nice...really feelin dis...couldve been longer tho...like a whole track...but i still liked it...8/10

and return tha fava...link in sig

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i liked this piece...it was a deep topic good references and vocab, flow wasnt the best though

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flow was a lil off but i like what you saying my brother... if u wanna drop a political piece go ahead and drop in the T.C.A we could use some

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thanks for the feedback....

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uppin for more feedback....keep i comin