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04-17-05, 08:03 AM | #1 | |
FiVe SoUrCe CeO
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~Topical: My Life as an Exorcist~
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"You ever get those little creepy things on the back of your neck?"
..........................."Get out of that house"............... ..........."You weren't supposed to help her."................ ................................................."Oh my god! What's happening?" [Whispers...& voices] My blood-line don't follow cardinals or Pontiffs, Popes or ghosts Past participle..part is simple gross perversion of God's hosts The Angel mistook me for bishop, endowed me with superstition Took my wrist and shook it.."The book of the dead is now livin" The buried now livid..headed toward my homestead, bones red Intention to resurrect it..their issues are soul, said The lone Cherub..from that moment, my inklings were in sync I could see shadows in hallows..and sense things like instincts Strange happenings attackin' me rapidly..maybe sleep apnia My pharynx pinched tight-like acne bump, dunno what got me up I was gasping for air..saw there standing in assault posture This demon-like hell-ish father..his sword drawn but God struck This monster back, my eyes flashin' like warnin' light, mornin' light Peered into the corner, right as my cornea spied a horrid site My knees became thin branches when the wind drafts hit I fell flat and grabbed quick..this fragile angel that was stabbed six Multiple times, it was culpable shit..I ran swift upstairs, improbable Had to rid the house of evil demons, was a lot of those So I slaughtered most and trotted so non-contrite cuz God was like: "Michael, I'm pleased with how you obeyed my commands, my right... Hand awaits thee"...hasty, I raced outside and got caught by satan Like he was waitin' for my conversation to come to cessation [Doctor Eugene S. Brown, psychiatrist]: So, Michael, you killed your entire family because you thought they were demons, and that God commissioned you to purge your house of evil? Listen, you can never understand God's plan, I know I'm right I hear him, low at night, over my right ear giving me his light His eternal plan to purge all man of principality..is all a whim It's out of me now..I'm God's soldier, so I could be called again And I don spiritual calibers formed powerful, mighty towers go Boom!...we all hear it, the chosen ones so, now I know I will kill again... **Stunned and in disbelief, the doctors on Mike's early-release panel quickly sedate him and drag him back to his holding cell, where he'll spend the rest of his life. The End. **I will drop links soon! |
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04-17-05, 08:09 AM | #2 | |
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04-17-05, 08:11 AM | #3 | ||
Sam Dope
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Deep shit man...Nice topical...Kinda liked it...I think it coulda been a little better knowing what you are capable of, but this piece was real nice...Good topic too, pretty original...Structure was perfect, so everything flowed on point...Good shit man...Hit up the links in my sig and return the fav...Thanx
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04-17-05, 08:38 PM | #4 | |
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appreciate it
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04-17-05, 08:40 PM | #5 | ||
You Love My Style.
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IP:
Hard topic really.....but well done, work on transitions to make it more smoother, emotions was good imagery was nice it felt like i was in the damn story..lol
nice wun
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04-17-05, 08:42 PM | #6 | |
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Ha word , this shyt was dope
I was really feeling it , topic was alittle weird, but shyt it was deep! ...you used lots of emotions , good feeling, nice imagery.. Structure was off next time try to line up your bars.. Flow was good , and so was your vocab , and wordplay overall nice job Q, keep it up , and i hope to see some more work from you in the future , :Thumbsup:
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04-18-05, 07:17 PM | #7 | |
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thannnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnx
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04-24-05, 02:55 AM | #8 | |
FiVe SoUrCe CeO
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eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeer sleepin ass bitches
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04-24-05, 04:05 AM | #9 | |
leave you rest'n pz's
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THIS WAS A KOO, DROP, YOUR OPENER LEFT ME WITH THE FEELING OF NOT WANTING TO READ MORE[caps off]but as i read on it got indepth n seemed quite unique in its story line/..........not what im used to seeing from you butall in all your vocab was ill(not for rap)but it is an enigma in a sense.,you got you own style Q n i appreciate it...
good verse n topic line..............verse was sl.oid........props.....pz
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speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts what the fuck, was you high..? did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...! . . fake fucks..move on...! |
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04-24-05, 09:17 PM | #10 | ||
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that was pretty dope Tha, nice play on the topic. I liked the ending, whole thing basically flowed, didnt especially like the use of some of the vocab but thats just personnel opinion. keep droppin man.
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