My Life Be like… ooooooooh aaaaaaah… my life be like…. Ooooooh aaaaaah…. Yep… ooooh aaaaah…

Sometimes I fall asleep cryin’… But I… get back up now and I keep tryin’… and I…
Lovin’ it now and I feel like ooh ah… And I… Lovin’ it now shibby shibby doo wop… Girl…
Outline your name on my back wit ya finger tips… Girl… I love the way you lickin’ on my lips… And I…
Will give you everything ya eva want… Cuz my… Life is so great it make me feel like ooh ah…

All this time I was focused on the wrong life…
I let the emotions take over and my songs write…
But now I’m back in control and it’s all right…
Who will come out this time… Rob might…
Seriously now life’s all good to the third power…
It’s no longer raining on me no more showers……
Reminiscing on my past and taking in a new 1st hour…
Trying to forget all the shit that makes the hurt louder…
I love what’s been dished on my plate now…
Girls back callin’ me and I’m back sayin’… hey now…
I love the way I don’t have everyday hate now…
I can stay up late now… wait now… Nothings fake now…

Sometimes I fall asleep cryin’… But I… get back up now and I keep tryin’… and I…
Lovin’ it now and I feel like ooh ah… And I… Lovin’ it now shibby shibby doo wop… Girl…
Outline your name on my back wit ya finger tips… Girl… I love the way you lickin’ on my lips… And I…
Will give you everything ya eva want… Cuz my… Life is so great it make me feel like ooh ah…

No one ever really understood me…
And it took me by surprise cuz I’m looking…
For fun in all the wrong places while their cooking…
Beef with me and I’m like step off I’m a rookie…
Comin’ outta high school right into the pros…
I don’t have the time for false friends or the hoes…
Keep on my toes… no slippin’ no mo’ makin’ foes…
No throwin’ bows… time to grow up make the money rolls…
Even tho I feel like I’m not ready It’s my choice…
Ooh aah I feel great when the words come out my voice…
Every song I’ve wrote though has rose my poise…
This is real music… man… this isn’t just white noise…

Sometimes I fall asleep cryin’… But I… get back up now and I keep tryin’… and I…
Lovin’ it now and I feel like ooh ah… And I… Lovin’ it now shibby shibby doo wop… Girl…
Outline your name on my back wit ya finger tips… Girl… I love the way you lickin’ on my lips… And I…
Will give you everything ya eva want… Cuz my… Life is so great it make me feel like ooh ah…

Everything is chiller than a Kansas City winter…
I’m no longer a loser man I’m a guaranteed winner…
I enter the epicenter in a new light like I shimmer…
Shibby shibby doo wop oooh ahh is my new tenure…
If you feel like I do throw ya M-Dubs in the air…
I don’t know too much but I know love isn’t fair…
Finally I realize in my eyes there no thug in this chair…
It’s Robby McCali… the one y’all lovin’ this year…
(sung)
These are the words from an oh-five grad…
Who’s learned a lot from the times I’ve had…
This song goes out to my family and friends…
I love y’all from now until life ends…

Sometimes I fall asleep cryin’… But I… get back up now and I keep tryin’… and I…
Lovin’ it now and I feel like ooh ah… And I… Lovin’ it now shibby shibby doo wop… Girl…
Outline your name on my back wit ya finger tips… Girl… I love the way you lickin’ on my lips… And I…
Will give you everything ya eva want… Cuz my… Life is so great it make me feel like ooh ah…
Sometimes I fall asleep cryin’… But I… get back up now and I keep tryin’… and I…
Lovin’ it now and I feel like ooh ah… And I… Lovin’ it now shibby shibby doo wop… Girl…
Outline your name on my back wit ya finger tips… Girl… I love the way you lickin’ on my lips… And I…
Will give you everything ya eva want… Cuz my… Life is so great it make me feel like ooh ah…

I work for mine… with the help of my friends…
Who’ll still be there when I’m makin’ my ends…
Sufficiently… Village P be makin’ them shake…
Takin’ ‘em all on just to be erasin’ the fake…
How could you want something for so long…
And went you finally get it you wanna move on…
So long Lawson… It’s been fun… I’ll admit…
But now the path is wide open for the gold so I gotta grab it…
My life be like…

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Ok emotion. Vocab needs to be upp. I see you went with the "Q" rhyme scheme. Nice. Flowed ok, stretch lines though. Your emotion needs to be upp. I suggest be more complex in your verse.

RTF "Silent Scream"

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mystery Is a Freak!!

ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*

haha, this would be a dope song.......and thats what it is......i hope you make it one, because it flowed nicely, and the lyrics are feel good........word to VPimp

keep up

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Damn you Ideph... I'm on top of it... you're killin' me bro.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=190947

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uppin'... hoars sleepin' on my open mic... me & chris'll have to bust a cap yo...

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mystery Is a Freak!!

ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*

uppin' I will... hooker... uppin' for feed bitches.

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good piece. Your first verse was kinda iffy. But the last 3 verses all flowed well. You have some good emotion and decent wordplay, i like the idea behind this piece because its original but i think you could have done better on it, Its not like your usual pieces but it wasnt bad either

overall: 7.5/10

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RV's Only 3 Time Topical Tourney Champion

i don't like it, sozzles .

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I don't know you... so oh well... thanks flow... I'm tryin' some new stuff...

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