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Old 06-03-05, 11:58 AM   #1
Dizzee Rascal
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Artisticamente r u fucking illiterate?
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Nobody to save ya, please quit rap do the whole site a favour
Im ya saviour, but ive seen better whole/hole punches on the margin of a paper..(oh shit!)
Give this cat a fright, ima nozzle my glocks just to watch my attack spray
Claim to be tight, but my knifes in ya spine leave witz-un-tied/whitsuntied consider it a holy-day/holiday
Charging, as like books in africa ur knowledge is starving
Im barging, paper cut ur eye lids so you see im winning by a margin
Wont be found, when my fists 'charge' ur face a brutal pound!
Can't make a sound, put a gun fru einsteins brain to leave 'witz' splattered on the ground


Ok from that verse ur saying there are no punches and theres no flow
and to elevate
I think U need to elevate
Quite obviously flow there if u fucking read it
No punches !! hahahaa r u stupid u just dont understand them calling me wack wtdf? i would fucking own u iv seen ur shit u fucking newbie
Dont lyk bitchin but u dum a fuck
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Old 06-03-05, 12:00 PM   #2
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Dude You Suck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!
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Old 06-03-05, 12:01 PM   #3
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to be honest dizzie your structure needs some work and thats whats affecting your flow.......
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Old 06-03-05, 12:02 PM   #4
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beef thread yes...but better off perhaps in O/M...

...oh you ain't Dizzee...change ya name be yourself not someone else...Stan
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Old 06-03-05, 12:03 PM   #5
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^^ Thank You Mizz Fyre I Love You Hun.........................
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Old 06-03-05, 12:05 PM   #6
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just telling dizzee bout how he can improve..........
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Old 06-03-05, 12:08 PM   #7
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^^ THen why you trying to battle me?.............................
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
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ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
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ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
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Old 06-03-05, 12:09 PM   #8
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^^^what d'ya mean why.........?
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Old 06-03-05, 12:13 PM   #9
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Well Far As Your verse goes

The only thing really Wrong with your verse Is Your Structure ....But That Doesnt make anybody wack Always Do your bars like This If possible \/

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& Not Like This

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^ Thats Sloppy Structure

Hope you Use the advice
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Old 06-03-05, 12:16 PM   #10
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^^^true i don't think you're WACK at all..........work on your structure....come wit more complex punches and you'll be good...........
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Old 06-03-05, 12:18 PM   #11
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^^ Well shit i say he's WHACK..................and stanza you said you wanted to battle me right?.......


GET @ ME ON PM............
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ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
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Old 06-03-05, 12:53 PM   #12
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^^ Well shit i say he's WHACK..................and stanza you said you wanted to battle me right?.......


GET @ ME ON PM............




are you serious ?

Ok Ok Lemme stop Playing ......Well DO You Do Text

bcuz Im not doin any topicals or poetry battles bcuz im too busy droppin in the league
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Old 06-03-05, 12:54 PM   #13
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are you serious ?

Ok Ok Lemme stop Playing ......Well DO You Do Text

bcuz Im not doin any topicals or poetry battles bcuz im too busy droppin in the league


I only do topicals..................but that dont mean i dont know punches...
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*
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Old 06-03-05, 12:57 PM   #14
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I only do topicals..................but that dont mean i dont know punches...



You Really Dont Know how do you ?

You Suck Man ......Peace You aint worthe my time
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Old 06-03-05, 12:23 PM   #15
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BULLSHIT HA HA!!! Structure Haz NOTHIN 2 Do Widda Flow @all Foo'z

structure=[da way u prezent da rhymes, & da cleaner ur structure da more complex it looks]

Flow=Da Wording ov verses!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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