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06-16-05, 11:50 PM | #1 | |
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*My Soul You Live In*
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all i need to do to see you is close my eyes, memory of your face gives me butterflies, with your laughter, charm and flare thank you for always being there, where love ever flows like a clear stream during the nights you live in my dreams, and all is safe and you are really here i wish if i open them you will appear, of the whole world; this my favorite place lying in bed in each other's embrace, oh, let me be as a bat, in love, blind for thus in dreams you'll live in my mind, for those times when dreams we must let go when the day moves in and the stars seem far, as the day passes, there you are in my heart for this is one place you will never part, when i smell that scent its your smile i feel you are the one who made my life real, as the wind blows upon my skin for it is my soul you live in. |
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06-17-05, 05:47 AM | #2 | ||
Odi et Amo
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IP:
Beautiful love poem, every girl's heart would just melt if someone would write this for her. I feel you gently build up the emotion till the last line that ended the piece in a serene, pure way. Not so much imagery but the emotion just poured out, went into detail about how much she means to you and such. Enjoyed reading this, keep it up!
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06-17-05, 04:49 PM | #3 | |
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IP:
thanks. will reply to a new poem that you write soon.
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06-17-05, 10:21 PM | #4 | ||
everytime i rhyme...
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where love ever flows like a clear stream
during the nights you live in my dreams, and all is safe and you are really here i wish if i open them you will appear, ....whoa son loving this here when i smell that scent its your smile i feel you are the one who made my life real, as the wind blows upon my skin for it is my soul you live in. ..thats dope son..real deep really feeling the emotion in this...loved the vibe
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