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08-18-05, 03:29 AM
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A World With No Water
IP:
A World With No Water A Dry Throat Forever, So.. I picked myself up, when lost in the desert Convicted by heat, hurts so much I cant convert Almost no food, still without liquid for my breathe Lost in such a drought, I’d only feel for death Proceeding in cation, a mix between my option So young, I needed adoption to try adaption Without no water, just gave a malicious fact.. I couldn’t forgive, but I still was a vicious rat Fighting for survival, why live to die then? Reach for Christ’s reality, & never to cry when.. I spot failure, but still to capture a given guess Unable to predict it, I felt a rapture driven press When livin a yes, I’m never to portray a lie And all this dryness would only delay a try In the myth’s, I feel more and more hopeless So I wished for help, hoping god would notice Needing rain, without it, it’d be feeding shame Proceeding in this game, I was cheating fame Yet I was desperate, so hectic I wanted a drink Measured so separate, yet I haunted a link.. A link to a river, needing to refresh my tongue So I kept my head up, making stress my fun.. ... Somehow I knew, did god believe my question? Or was it a pronunciation that strived a session ... Finally A Chance To Survive.. My dream to quench my thirst, to bench my burst Never to live this curse again, never for the worst I prevail a provoked liquid, proven a missed thought A lisped plot, bought a chance of a twist naught A trick, I almost thought that was really for pretend Pointed a certain way, but I wanted to sore extended A vision to make a proper decision in my precision The scheme to define it, without separation from it And with such division, I’m lost in a worldwide view Unable to pursue in life, stuck in a denied brew To construct a livin with just one more need When sweaty and thirsty, a taste would feed..me No transition in my position for just one sip Just to have one drink would make me flip ... My story of a dreamt reality of pain..without water
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08-18-05, 03:44 AM
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The Paragraph President
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IP:
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08-18-05, 04:52 AM
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Above Originality
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ayo this peace was ill homie and decent man WERD.......was feeling it man DOPENESS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
RTF on my OM called on the rize or ARE YA FEELIN ME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! here's on the rize: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=204741
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08-18-05, 06:40 AM
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**the council**
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IP:
this was a pretty good drop.....flow was nice as well as structure...think you could maybe up your vocab a lil bit in some parts.....but overall a nice piece...keep it up
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