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12-11-05, 03:23 AM | #1 | |
.L.B.S. PUSHER.
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My One. And OnlY.
IP:
guess whom im thinkin of? (who)
Guess whom is my first Love? (who) yes you. . ................. i think about it your the one for me Could possibly. we were the ones meant to be im always here for you. . belive me.. cuz my love is always true ill love u from the end to the Start till F. O. E. V. E. R. you the on i look up to i cant be affraid your the on i can depend. show my true feelings you your always down for me never keeps a frown on me always a smile thats worth a while your the one for me we the ones that meant to be buh your MY L.O.V.E |
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12-11-05, 01:41 PM | #2 | ||
All these Dead Presidents
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IP:
This piece is better than your other piece but once again, nothing amazing. Your vocab is still nothing jaw dropping. Your emotion is there but nothing too amazing. It was heart-felt which is key, and your structure was much better than other poem.
Overall about a 5/10 , better than other piece though. - 1
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12-14-05, 07:29 PM | #3 | |
.L.B.S. PUSHER.
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IP:
k. thanks for the help. anyone else has other desicions?
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