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Old 07-05-06, 10:51 PM   #1
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Power Of Creativity

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Now since this whole discussion is about use'n ya mind/
Lemme take the time........................to excercise mine/
Only the things you been through is what you gotta spit/
But isnt that take'n away from what makes Hip Hop the shit/
Creativity, a lost cause lost upon the ones who keep it real/
But I'm express'n my thoughts, yea, tell'n u how i feel/
I take a pen n let the ink spill into my pad/
But thats doesnt mean the shit i brag about is the shit i already have/
Yea i can tell you a story but it aint gotta be the truth/
As long as i'm sick wit the shit inbetween i aint can say what i feel in the booth/
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Old 07-06-06, 01:18 AM   #2
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this is good poetry but to change this to rap you have to make it first person listen

abuse rhymes when i use my mind in discussions// I'm straight ascinine but let me take the time to explain this complex and lame situation // now flowing corrupt but when i was growing up I saw raw flaws didn't obey the laws eighter//
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Old 07-06-06, 01:24 AM   #3
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lol thnx for da feed man i really appreciate it, thnx for da cypher to
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Old 07-07-06, 11:50 AM   #4
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Old 07-07-06, 06:02 PM   #5
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this was ehh, your rhymes were rather basic, and not really creative. maybe take some more time in ut next drop n polish it up.
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