Im New Here And Just Looking For Some Advice



Im Just Sitting Here Gazing At The Stars/
Looking For My Life's Purpose But I Know Its Not To Far/

I Gotta Find It Soon Before I Make Any Mistakes/
I Already Made So Many That Im Feel Like Im Drowning
At The Bottom Of The Lake/

Why? Why Do I Feel This Way?/
What Did I Do To Deserve This Hate?/

It Feels Like Everywhere I Go People Are Always Better/
I Try So Hard That I Cant Try No Harder/

If I Walk To School People Staring Like They Lions And Im Ham/
Is It This Shady Shirt? This Crooked Hat? Who Really Cares I Am
Who I Am/

So I Gotta Move Fast, Gotta Perform Miracles/
So I Stay Locked Up In This Room Writting These Syllables/

Im Gonna Make These Kids Feel My Rush/
If You Dont Feel It Then It Must Be To Real To Touch/

This Is It, Last Straw, Thats All, Thats It/
No More Of This, Because I Call It Quits/

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"FLYIN SOLO"

this was nice if it rhymed a little faster would be a good rap piece right here but as is just poetry needing some vocab but it had good purpose so keep up the good work

THANKS, YEAH THAT WAS MY FIRST ONE BUT IM FEELIN THE VOCAB, THANKS FOR THE ADVICE ILL REMEBER THAT

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"FLYIN SOLO"

not bad, decent flow, maybe u'r structure could of been better but not a bad verse

I Gotta Find It Soon Before I Make Any Mistakes/
I Already Made So Many That Im Feel Like Im Drowning
At The Bottom Of The Lake/

not bad i feel what u saying just get a bit more creative with it an u def be aight fam....

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NOT TO BE FUCKED WITH!!!!

RTF an drop some feed on my open mic Feat thesinnister....

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NOT TO BE FUCKED WITH!!!!

yea im feeling this too,it reminds me of how i feel sometimes keep this up