burn tracks wak rap cats earn urn's fast
blast first cuz questions for the devil to ask
no ski mask aint hidin shit i walk my own path
pyschopath trapped in a world of drugs n gats
muthas huggin lost souls disposable like last nites trash
shots pop while lifes flash b4 eyes an thats that
my pesence is the definition of crossin a black cat
bad luk is comin full force like a locamotive crash

if u got beef im afta u aint no gangsta jus do wat i got to
if your weak im ur echo i mock you ur popped i shot you
layin face flat i dropped you read my lines learn a lesson you ought' to
Im the head of the class still bloody ya mouf like u were sukin on glass
u sucky wit raps while my bars rippin ya bak out literally ya spine no longa intact
most emcees bars soft like wet noodles they whole deminor is cute fukin poodles
from the slums go head and google....my adress the block watcha's alert the snipers to shoot you!




---kwik key drop jus showcasing a bit i hope this site isnt to fukin dead one

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=245451
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=245425

ight piece.. like someone said to me, it shows u got SOME talent u kno
i kno this a keystyle but, at least try to format it as if it was to a beat
nice rhyme scheme..
keep droppin

6/10

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keep elevating kid.....

4-10

Pretty cool, for a first timer...6/10

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r0gue.
.I bring down rain so heavy it curse the head.

At least this piece shows that you understand a rhyme scheme, but try not to have such a monosyllabic piece, try to include some multis and metaphors some other shit too dude, just keep workin on it.

5/10 - not bad for a new comer

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OptimisticallyGenius

Display more to the mind then just gun n' such, keystyles are good but it limits the mind when it comes to imagry and emotion to of the most important cats in a OM, which will weigh down your rates for any of your pieces if you continue on such a path as this, but props on your first drop i'll keep in eye out on your improvement

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crhyme sindicate
Open Mic Hall Of Famer

not bad,you definitly have potential,just work on all of the above and keep elevating
i felt like you got out what you were trying to say and it didnt sound to bad either..

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