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Old 03-03-03, 08:20 PM   #1
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~Talkin~
I Wanna Be With You But Im
Unsure Of Myself I Know You Love
Me Even Broke But Im Unsure Of Tha
Wealth I Could Sell Anything
Easily But I Could Get Caught And
Wed Never Be Together So Im
Questionin Myself I Wanna Be With
You Forever Is It Worth It Would It
Really Be Love Then...
You Know Im Educated
Enough To Get Tha Schoolin
But That I Really Wanna Do Music
Just Believe That Ill Do It.....
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I Cant Promise You A Life Of Sunshine
Riches Or Wealth Or An Easy Pathway
Through Changes Growin Older But
I Really Wish You Would Help...
Through It All I Can Promise All My
Hearts Devotion And A Smile To Chase
Away Your Tears Im Down To Be Tha
Man That You Go With People Can Talk
All They Want They Dont Know Shit...
Im Picturin A Love Thats Ever True And Glowin
Souls Intertwined A Hand To Hold In Yours
Through Each Tomorrow Will You Follow...
I Will Along This Path To A Better Future
Ill Be Succesful You Wont Be Tha Wife
Of A Loser Never That For Tha Life Of Me
Thats Somethin That Id Never Get Used Ta....
Your Beautiful...And I Wanna Make
You Happy Slap Me If I Shouldnt Treat
You Better Like Last Man Couldnt...
Ill Awake From This Dream As Great
As It Seems You'll See A Switch
From Peaceful Nigga To Crazy
Even Though I Go On Actin Like Nothin
Phase Me ANd It Aint What It Seems
Im Feelin Your Style And Energy....
Happy Your Into Me Just Dont Fuck With My
Enemies If Your Feelin Sick Ill Serve As Your
Remedy Prove I Got Plans And Direction
To Be Together Were Destined
I Dont Mind Answerin Questions Over
Kids Love Being Married And Sexin As Of Now
Im Alone Upin This House Kinda Depressed
When My Homiez Want Me To Get Out You
Exlemplify A Perfect Reason To Rhyme
Keep In Mind Ima Dreamer Myself Visualising
Us Together This Could Be Love Forever
Cant Believe Im Even Sayin These Words
I Gotta Be Changing Lets Turn Tha Pages
Pushin On Through Tha Stormy Weather

If You Read All This..Thank You Forrealz

~Content~

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Old 03-12-03, 07:37 PM   #2
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You Actually Like Her Like That?

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you never do anything like this..

its long but worth reading...
hope shes worth it cause
you deserve someone
like that in your life homie
just remember those you
grew up with and where
you came from..peace

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Old 03-12-03, 08:11 PM   #3
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Thanks Much...Really Dosent Seem Like Somethin
Id Do But We All Go Through Changes And What Not

I Know I Have Its All About Gettin Your Mind Right
But Still Watchin Your Back N Front So You Dont
Get Sidetracked Regardin All Aspects Of Life...

~Content~
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Old 03-13-03, 02:30 PM   #4
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Raw...and full of emotions...

...once more, it had a lot of personal depth to it...i felt the whole 'theme' of this piece....vocab was used to good effect, if not at times hindered by lack of structure...

...what i mean by that is the basic structure...the way you place your lines makes it hard to read, and disrupts the flow for the reader...i think it's also the style of writing it is...but mainly just the way it is layed out....

...all in all, was still a very good piece, which i quite liked..but a bit hard to read and getting a good flow to...

...respect...

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You were once Contenflo, weren't you? Personally think that sounds better, and is more subtle giving it a strong meaning, than Content Flowz, just a personal opinion though....
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Old 03-13-03, 11:22 PM   #5
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pssst...darneck...you blew my cover...zoikes...sike

It Says That But I Like Content After Goin Through
A Buncha Names But I Hate When People Say How
It Sounds Rather Than How I Say It..I Dont Gotta
Big head Or Nothin I Aint Shit...

Thank You For Actually Replyin To This
Seriously Homie Thank Ya Very Much

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Old 03-14-03, 12:50 AM   #6
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I liked the raw setting that this piece brought out, but the whole letting your emotions go, is a road that has been ventured out too much upon. It's nice when there is a curve ball thrown in the mix of the style, but this was not that sorta piece. Emotion wise it was straight to the point, nothing really stood out to me besides that fact. Imagery was to an extent non-existant, not saying that there was none, but was minimal. Strucutre wise it was decent, I would have liked to have seen a bit more of a break up into stanzas, but this was nice, it might have given the piece less of an apperance of one that went on forever.

but like I said it was a nice piece, just not expanded into other realms that doesn't really entise the reader...

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I Cant Promise You A Life Of Sunshine
Riches Or Wealth Or An Easy Pathway
Through Changes Growin Older But
I Really Wish You Would Help...
Through It All I Can Promise All My
Hearts Devotion And A Smile To Chase
Away Your Tears Im Down To Be Tha
Man That You Go With People Can Talk


Nice emotion, just carry out an extention of that and try maybe speaking from a metaphorical sense, that helps alot in these piece, nice though...


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Old 03-14-03, 01:12 AM   #7
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then again if you dig harder into the piece every line does have meaning and flows nicely, just how you percive it, but I feel you, thanks..
Your Words Girl ^^^

Imagery Is Alright But These Are My
Feelings For Someone I Care About And
Even More Because Of Somethiing Bad
That Happened..I DontFeel Like Sugarcoating
My Speech Even Though Many Think Thats Unique

Thanks For Replyin


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Old 03-15-03, 11:38 PM   #8
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Old 03-17-03, 04:57 PM   #9
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Old 03-19-03, 02:18 PM   #10
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Old 03-19-03, 05:17 PM   #11
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Peace fam...

could mos def feel your emotions up in that...

ima sucker for the reality kinda poem lol

"...I Cant Promise You A Life Of Sunshine
Riches Or Wealth Or An Easy Pathway..."

I hear you kid, can relate myself...

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Old 03-19-03, 06:46 PM   #12
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i dont think you really read it
all but i dont care either..

thanks for replyin homie..peace
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Old 03-23-03, 09:05 PM   #13
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Old 03-23-03, 09:48 PM   #14
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that was tight man. it was so emotional and in touch with youre aspiration of love...nice bro. you deserve that for your life.
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Old 03-25-03, 04:43 PM   #15
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Thanks Much Man..We All Gotta Get Our Lives Together Though
I Hope You Make Things Happen In School Homie And I Hope
Some Music Gets Done In The Future...Im Beig Pulled In Every Directon Right Now Though In Regards To What I Shoulda Done
Should Be Doing A Wanna Do..Thanks For Replyin
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