listen to these rhymes, they are like voodoo curses/
curse verses like a wicked witch from of the West/
now that's murderous/
do you think that you can really spit rhymes like me/
I'll make your rhymes sound like a muthafuckin' castastophe/
listen to me / you know you can't become an emcee like me/
you don't know the difference from a gorilla or chim - pan - zee/
so sit down and write some words that make some goddamn sense/
making people dense up at the consequence/
from the suspense that you hear from this verbal offense/
show some defense /
you muthafuckin' punk/
your voice box shrunk, now you sound like a small ass chipmunk/
listen' up! on how I rhyme about true hip hop/
spittin' rhymes that won't flop but will stay on top/
and overtop those whack emcees that drop from the top/
rhyming before I learned my ABC' and 123's/
I've been taking out emcee's one by one, can't you see?/
that I'm young and trying to learn the game/
it's a shame that some with the fame don't even know the game/
dont' want to mention their names but I got to say/
that my game is hard like the Bucs and Green Bay/

no, this sucks.......elevate



-OuT-

at the beginning it was off... but at the end you started to pick up there... you a newbie but hey... you got raw talent... keep rhymin...

shit aight, for u startin out.. some nice lines
more vocab make it sound better though,
lookin foward to seein more of your work.. just elevate abit
peace out...