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06-20-03, 03:17 AM
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The Sea of Blood Upon the Ground
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another patriotic poem about war.
The creases of the battle hardened, The sea of blood upon the ground, A gun in the hands of a warrior, The dead and dying countless, A war fought to ensure freedom, The living noble rise in triumph, The dead lay in sacrifice, Millions have died so billions could live, I wish I could have been there, I know I would not have fled, Hopefully I would have been one of the living, But I would be proud to be one of the dead. |
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06-23-03, 01:54 AM
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IP:
nice,
could be better if it was a little longer, you captured the feelings well, nice job everall peace
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06-23-03, 02:45 AM
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Re: The Sea of Blood Upon the Ground
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nice opening....starting it by the setting is really good..props! Quote:
deep!...i liked how the way u describe this.."...dying countless"..i loved that one...it's quite strong..just basically stood out Quote:
vocabulary is well used in here...i liked it! Quote:
good message...i liked how the way you made the reader understand the importance of those ppl who died Quote:
hmmm pretty interesting...teh courage and determinationn..it showed on here...love it Quote:
these last few lines are definitely my fave from all of them...just makes me feel soo proud of all those ppl who died for our country... good job...like a tribute to all those who sacrficed their lives for their country...nice work!
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06-23-03, 09:54 PM
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06-24-03, 02:30 PM
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IP:
^^what the hell are u doin? fuckin freeposter. I am gonna report this, bitch. damn newbies fuckin freepost everywhere.
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06-24-03, 02:34 PM
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IP:
yo i thought this was a deep post nice choice of words keep this up kid
holla back sheck my shit out for me http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=60515
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06-25-03, 03:58 PM
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IP:
uppin 4 response
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