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06-30-03, 01:22 AM
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grown up hard, (gang related)
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born as a baby
grown up hard slayin me for my trouble lifes like football dont fumble if i slip or stumble my whole life will... crumble.. to a hell id wish id never fell in the first place now my lifes gone to waste, do somethin wrong.. get chased, get beat takin me right of my feet so i could fit in now everything i do is a sin life i lost never to win like a sharp pain of a pin goin right into ur heart gettin higher on the chart so you can get more respect if you low u get beat and neglect kill you with direct affect you cant stand it they wont more outta you, the demand it, its against the law so harsh they band it but i have to do it and if i dont........my life, i just blew it |
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06-30-03, 11:32 AM
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IP:
dat wuz fly cuzz..no doubt
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06-30-03, 12:19 PM
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A bit of a strange structure............but was ai
you got your feelings across.....thats a must in poetry Keep droppin tho you got a lil poet in you wantin to come out i think.....ai -pz |
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06-30-03, 12:32 PM
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EVERYBODY HATES ME
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best in the west dead in death i dont really make sence
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06-30-03, 01:53 PM
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IP:
thanx to the people who said things that made
sence..... Drop some more in here please, aight thanx pz |
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06-30-03, 10:48 PM
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IP:
hit dis up for me please, holla.
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07-03-03, 02:11 AM
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IP:
hit dis up for me please, holla.
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07-04-03, 01:07 AM
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BANNED For Being A Freeposter
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That was nice nigga
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07-05-03, 02:05 AM
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IP:
people hit this 4 me please, holla..........
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07-05-03, 06:07 AM
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IP:
Emotions were there...portrayed in a fairly simple, short sharp way...
...what i'd say is try to expand. And fill each line (especially in between each line) up more. It seemed loose at times. Though the emotions were there... ..resp... |
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07-06-03, 02:19 PM
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IP:
hit this people, gimme feed back, ok.
holla |
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07-09-03, 07:12 PM
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IP:
come on people, what ya think?
holla back |
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07-16-03, 07:57 PM
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IP:
hit dis up for me please, holla.
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07-16-03, 11:10 PM
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Light Weight
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it was pretty dope..on the real
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