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Pain (higher Intelligence)
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Wrote this one a while back so let me know what you think...
(Feed back appreciated) I AM THE HIGHER INTELLIGENCE.... My rhyme scheme comes quick like the flux capasator/ (Back.T.fut) Battling you has become nothing but a lyrical massacre/ I cripple Mc's, now they cant count/ When they try to mimic my matmatical mouth/ Splitting brain cells like intersections/ Words coming from all directions/ Making ya earlobes burst in less than 60 seconds/ I keep the mic flow like voilinists and mystros/ Fried ya molecules and this is only the intro/ Battle axe wielding, crushing rib cages/ It amazes me how the pain can last for ages/ Mind more twisted than labryinthes and mazes/ My armory changes to the calibur of a katana/ The blades steel fused hotter than volcanic saunas/ I put Mc's through psychological trauma/ Brining enraged violence like the Los Angeles riots/ Level of fake mc's is negative minus/ Fists of fury, lock ya doors in a hurry/ Enemies just like squirells, they all scurry/ Locked in position my swords started its ignition/ Im ready to compete for the impossible mission/ Lost and found,.......and you still missing/ My minds more complex than Navaho code Encripting/ Your body left lifeless, I tell more truth than Tarot Card Psychic's/ Clog more nostrols than sickness and sinus/ I duplicate crimes for all mankind/ Challenging the truth like Zodiac Signs/ Staying well hidden like millitary mines/ Take sight from the unworthy and give on to the blind/ Only one last step accept the world is mine....... I AM THE HIGHER INTELLEGENCE..... Silence is an option.... When will you break it..? |
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IP:
let me get some feedback wheter you like it or not...
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Suspended Suspense
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IP:
decent drop, nice vocabulary, the flow structure could use some work but overall decent drop
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IP:
thanks appreciate the feedback
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IP:
Maybe ur mouth iz faster than mine...cuz I couldn't get some of dat stuff out. But it wuz a very nice drop. I liked it...
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IP:
yeah the flow fell off a whole lot of times during this... and at some points i didnt feel that it related to the title. i can tell that you are new at this and i can say for a newbie you are alright. if you work hard you can really do something but as for right now you need some work.
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IP:
No im not new to this it was something I wrote 1 and a half years
ago...( A While BACK) |
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IP:
thanks for the feedback though
honest opinions only help the MC |
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IP:
It was aiight.
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