My first open mic. I hope u all enjoy.

Verse1:
All alone I stand tryin ta be ur man/
For u girl I would give both of my hands and/
Both of my legs just for u give me a chance/
I'm makin plans to take u dancin/
Make u weak in the knees/
A new lease on love/
Baby girl u released a dove/
Trapped in my cold heart/
Torn apart wit jagged pieces/
My manly intuition sayin forget about women/
But, ur intervention has given me a whole new vision/
No more division, just me wishin and u listenin/
With intentions of bein wit me/
It's been under consideration long enuff/
Quit makin me wait and let's start us/
Change ur relationship situation, I know it's tough/
Here's a little bit of inspiration, in God I trust,
We'll make it/

Chorus (repeat x2):
Girl, u know I want u/
And yes it is true, I do/
But u won't let go of him/

Verse 2:
Hey girl, we haven't talked in a while/
All the while, ma, I've peepin ur style/
The way that u walk and ur beautiful smile/
Have me goin wild, but I have to calm it down/
The word around, is that u got a man/
Who don't even talk to u when he holds ur hand/
The way I see it he can't do u like I can/
Here's my plan, ask u to take my hand/
And as time continues/
I can see a baby girl wit eyes just like u/
And a big house and cars I just copped u/
That life, it would be just grand/
But just another one of my fantasylands/
In reality I'm still tryin to be ur man/
U still wanna know what I'm tryna say/
Okay, I want u more and more at the end of each day/

deep shit,did one of these songs maself so i feel ya dawg,good message and expression came through.

peace

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personally i didnt like it, why? as deep as it is, the true essence in hip hop is: creativeness. although ya message was str8, it seemed rookie, u need more creativity

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