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Old 08-19-03, 04:45 PM   #1
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Thumbs down something...

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I'm a masochist, climaxing as vats of visual acid drip
waves from the outside sit in my lapses which inhabited
the greater part of a lesser life, being stuck in this catharsis
83 channeling bloodlust in an abyss of darkness
decoding transmissions grants visions of utter agony
masked torturers cut anatomies, who lusted fantasy
life-the remains of another day sold for minimal gain
coating each thought with a subliminal strain, it'll remain
no matter the penance, ask for a sentence-i'll grin and lie
prerecorded monologues my only source of stimuli
satellite feeds my daily sustenance, i pass most days
curling my frail frame in front of waves of cathode rays
seeking blessed asylum in a world of excessive violence
hallucinations overtake reality, bloodshed tests horizons
pain thresholds paint chests cold, disciples are derelicts
with care, videocameras on tripods shall prepare the crypt
a confused heretic, with beta-compatible dreams
hoping to be awoken from his with a rabid animal's scream
bow to the latest religion where the natives shall pray with a vision
mechanical manacles, fatality, hate and derision, nascent edition.
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Old 08-19-03, 04:52 PM   #2
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sick, kinda took the vocab abit too far, remember there people that dont understand you (not that i dont), try and be clever in a sense of creative with vocab, getZ me sta?
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Old 08-19-03, 04:54 PM   #3
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Old 08-19-03, 04:59 PM   #4
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no matter the penance, ask for a sentence-i'll grin and lie

~grin and bear it...funny...well worded~ nancy

well writte..nothin to depict from it...
even with the content dilluted it
still sounds nice...

good drop...beware of individuals
with a pitbull complex homie

oigame malo muchacho?

la paz mi hombre

please return the favor

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=74068

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Old 08-19-03, 08:51 PM   #5
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no matter the penance, ask for a sentence-i'll grin and lie
prerecorded monologues my only source of stimuli


wow. . Really good piece, especially in the sectors of vocabulary and flow (as evident by the quoted line). Is this song on your sound-click, by any chance?

Only question is, what was your inspiration(s) for writing this?
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Old 08-19-03, 11:18 PM   #6
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Yeah I agree. Very good vocabulary throughout!
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Old 08-25-03, 03:32 PM   #7
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no look pass...
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Old 08-25-03, 08:28 PM   #8
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know whats funny, 'Rrowbic? Every one of your threads in open mic seems riddled with freeposts. I guess your custom title makes it a tid bit of poetic justice.

anyways, all your shiet rocks the casba...only your flow was little off at some parts in this, but your rhymes were off the proverbial hook, and the soup makes me feel dizzy.

sorry, I jsut don't have much to say to yer crray Z werdology.
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Old 08-25-03, 10:45 PM   #9
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I jsut don't have much to say to yer crray Z werdology.


Me Neither... Thats Why It Was Blessed With The Appropiate Title...

Keep The Freeposting Coming...
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