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Old 08-23-03, 01:18 PM   #1
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Exclamation **The Aftermath**

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No matter how nice your raps form on this forum, these niggas still ignore ‘em//
Like you ain’t got skills, and they call ill what real rappers call boredom//
They poor ‘em on the boards, with childish and immature metaphors//
Spitting verses versus real bol’s ( boys), but they still feel the rewards//
I’m not complaining, just no-braining a keystyle, but for the meanwhile it’s a thesis//
Still tryna come up how a little fuck came up with a win when I ripped him to pieces//
Maybe I’m a sore-loser who sobs or a producer who’s a snob//
Or a victim who was bashed caused by the aftermath of a blowjob//
They got me all knuckled up, cuz some herbs from the burbs buckled up//
And jumped on this nigga’s dick like a little bitch in double dutch//
And yeah, I’m whining cuz I verbally pulled the glock up out the linen//
Designing all my shots in the verse with a pen full of Malice like that nigga from “Grindin”//
But still got caught when I brought that nigga’s skull on a plate, detonated his face-//
Merked his manhood history- but they still gave that lil’ nigga a victory//
And this shit is very bizarre cuz every bar he spit was so ‘Juvenile’-//
I jumped to the pictures thread just to see if 24 Karat had some gold teeth in his smile//
You can go peep it (the battle) in a while, but I’m still not done; this is called “blowing off steam”//
So allow me to “ventilate” against those who’s tryna blow of 2-15//
Better yet, let me reset, gather my thoughts and never forget//
That despite the new screen name this spit flame was always a vet//
I’m probably this board’s biggest threat, when I rap, I’m hot//
I bring these niggas hell but if all else fails, I can always take up pop//

It's Philly, baby.

Last edited by 215_Karats : 08-26-03 at 05:55 AM.
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Old 08-23-03, 01:39 PM   #2
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yo i can easly spit and riches the thing u know how rap is

sandwiches dog i'll put outta yur mysery son the only way u gets

recognize is black history month look nigga this chapter is done

what u get outta this anotha loss son shit ain't funny when start

losin it probably don't bother cause that's tha only thing u doin yo

look i'll battle whoeva but if nigga go against me dey ain't cleva

this nigga desperate for some holla at yur boy ace a.ka. young

buck
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Old 08-23-03, 03:28 PM   #3
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lol............................nice drop, stayed on point, flowed very well, nice multi's. metaphors, good piece
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Old 08-23-03, 06:28 PM   #4
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thanks, fam...uppin this mufucka one time.....holla at ya boy.
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Old 08-23-03, 07:45 PM   #5
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Ace: WTF Was That!

Rhyming/Flow
Your Flow here Was Sick, It Was Suprisingly Smooth, Your Bars Were The Same Length Preety Much Throughout Which Really Helps "pan It Out", Nice....8/10

Vocab/Wordplay
Was Lackin' A Bit On The Vocab. You Had NIce Metas Though, And Good Wordplay..Work On Your Overall Vocab Though...6/10

Concept/Topic
You Rapped About Alotta Good Relevant Things here, MOstly To Do With Rb. Bars Like: "Maybe I’m a sore-loser who sobs or a producer who’s a snob//
Or a victim who was bashed caused by the aftermath of a blowjob//"


n'
"I’m probably this board’s biggest threat, when I rap, I’m hot//
I bring these niggas hell but if all else fails, I can always take up pop//"
- Were nice, Good Self Glorification There..8/10

Overall
7/10, It Was A Good Freestyle, Flow Was Sick, But Work ON Your Vocab A little More..

Word!
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Old 08-24-03, 03:06 AM   #6
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Thanks for the love, fam, keep it crackin over there in Ireland mate! Holla. And I'm uppin this mu'fucka 2 times.
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Old 08-24-03, 03:16 AM   #7
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all he did was bitch about him getting a raw deal.

this nigga needs practice
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Old 08-24-03, 06:24 AM   #8
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Just uppin' this thang.
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Old 08-24-03, 10:16 AM   #9
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YO I GO WITH RHYTHMIC ON THIS BUT I ENJOYED EVERY LINE STILL IT WAS WELL COMPOSED AND IF YOUR IN LOOKS FOR A CREW THAT JUST STARETED I OFFER MINE HOLLA AT ME
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Old 08-24-03, 12:57 PM   #10
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tight ish...1ne
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Old 08-24-03, 01:22 PM   #11
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IM DIGGING THE FIRST FLOW IT WAS TIGHT KEEP THEM COMMING AND HAVE ALL OTHER FAKE RAPPERS RUNNING
KEEP IT TIGHT ITS THE SHARKS LURKING IN THEM GLOOMY WATERS
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Old 08-25-03, 09:49 AM   #12
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Uppin this thang...holla.
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Old 08-26-03, 05:59 AM   #13
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I'm gon run with this ball like crazy..means: uppin^^^
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Old 08-26-03, 06:25 AM   #14
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Quote:
Originally posted by cokeyace
yo i can easly spit and riches the thing u know how rap is

sandwiches dog i'll put outta yur mysery son the only way u gets

recognize is black history month look nigga this chapter is done

what u get outta this anotha loss son shit ain't funny when start

losin it probably don't bother cause that's tha only thing u doin yo

look i'll battle whoeva but if nigga go against me dey ain't cleva

this nigga desperate for some holla at yur boy ace a.ka. young

buck


^please please STFU!!!!!!

Now on to 215 i understood everything you were trying to get across. The flow was smooth and you stayed on top of the topic all the way. The vocab was light but i think you planned it that way. not only did i understand you plight i sympathize...............

No matter how nice your raps form on this forum, these niggas still ignore ‘em//
Like you ain’t got skills, and they call ill what real rappers call boredom//
They poor ‘em on the boards, with childish and immature metaphors//
Spitting verses versus real bol’s ( boys), but they still feel the rewards//

Everything about this piece shows a natural talent and i'm pretty sure you're a dope audio head too.......8.5/10
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