Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio |
|
09-03-03, 03:42 PM | #1 | |
New to RB
|
this jus somthin i had written check it out
IP:
what up Element and welcome back to the board
in case you havent noticed we had the case of some rap star frauds but im still chillin raising up a toast my pistol goin defintly make these niggaz catch the holy ghost its made niggaz up in here that want to run me out quick to get back at me and run they mouth but im in the house gettin tipsy on remy everynight my cousin in Panama sending me kites yall faker than them bitches that got hair weaves hair cornrowed, du rag while im cuffin the jeans i roll deep and im still gettin at hoes keep it like high heels and make these niggas stay on they toes drive threw your block wit my windows tented if you aint in it then mind your buisness aint nothing change this nigga is still the same its goin be all over once the world learns the name this is sick, suck a dick, fuck a trick, hot damn son of a bitch if you want it come get it cause im wit it i guess these niggaz dont know where they place be huh well Manolo comes to doors so you can face be pa all the shit to your self yall den over did some of yall stuck between labels cause yall over bid so let me keep this gutter when i fuck wit chicks make my name hot in you like a burning dick its manolo biotch you heard of it
__________________
Xclusive point 90 im 4 real shawty I make shit happen http://us.f1.yahoofs.com/users/a2a1...fc2EcABx_wPcIAH |
|
09-03-03, 03:49 PM | #2 | |
Guest
|
IP:
not to bad but not ill either.....ya flow was kinda off...but ya vocab was nice and ya wordplay was nice....so overall fix the flow fix ya problem holmes..........................................ra ting......8/10
and holmes if you not in a crew then hit up IJL and tryout |
|
09-03-03, 03:54 PM | #3 | |
Pleas, Not the teeth...!!
|
IP:
syntext sed it all basicly..!! Im not tellin ya how to flow and shit cuz every1 got theyre own structure of buildin a verse..!!!
but try to keep it all in the same length...!! like syntext sed....sort that out...and ull be a great asset to RB..!! chek my shit out pleaze hombre..!! http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=77661 |
|
09-03-03, 03:59 PM | #4 | |
Guest
|
IP:
i was feelin actually feelin tha flow,this due writes as if he was spittin ths peice,sometimes different bar length actually help for emphasis or jus bein different,also vocab and topic was done descently,tha peice wasn't great but it was aight,a good startin point.
Peace |
|
09-03-03, 04:09 PM | #5 | ||
i changed my title !!
|
IP:
some of it didn't flow without rhyming it's hard toflow but it's still not a bad peice again you stayed on topic and didn't do too bad with it
__________________
win loss record 18-19 with 7 k.o's and sign up for the battle league would yeah, also show up if your already in the league |
||
09-04-03, 03:10 PM | #6 | |
New to RB
|
IP:
LET ME GET SOME FEEDBACK
__________________
Xclusive point 90 im 4 real shawty I make shit happen http://us.f1.yahoofs.com/users/a2a1...fc2EcABx_wPcIAH |
|
09-04-03, 03:15 PM | #7 | |
New to RB
|
IP:
AND IF ITS A CREW LEADER OUT HERE.....CONSEIDER ME.....I NEVER RUN ALONE
__________________
Xclusive point 90 im 4 real shawty I make shit happen http://us.f1.yahoofs.com/users/a2a1...fc2EcABx_wPcIAH |
|
Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
Display Modes | |
|
|