a freefall to hit tha ground wit no sound/
look around and found/
u'll thinkin u could/
beat me in my hood/
but u can't even if i was gagged n bound/
wat's wrong? u finally realized this/
a split headache from my gun, than made ur eyes split/
now u seein double vision? and u want to be forginnin?/
fuck that, I have chosen that u should not be livein/
tha judges won't budge/
pass judgement on a cuz/
fuck tha love of tha mortals, i'll kill doves/
white morphed to red/
but black instead/
is tha inside of ur head/
enough said.../

tha judgement has come by verbalness arranged in guns/
ur finished, done...no more fun/
act hardcore, face meet hard floor/
such a disgrace to call urself part of tha hard four/ (four horsemen)

verse 2 will be a curse too/
since birth u/
thought no-raps was thirst through/
a dry desert, desert ur mind/
one time, more than once wit one rhyme/
not a crime simply tha law undefined/
undid tha judgement? no not this time/
ur in hell, where u'll dwell, cause u fell/
through tha CPU screen of a cheap and weak DELL/
killed and had gotten billed in tha aftalife/
for ur body chilled even afta u melt/
nuclear strike.../
simpathy is no existance/
persistant enough to exist wit/
tha bitch clips out of a hitless/
bitch this is tha shit BITCH/
u have been judged, as a stupid bitch/
so go to ur grave and behave in that ditch/

tha judgement has come by verbalness arranged in guns/
ur finished, done...no more fun/
act hardcore, face meet hard floor/
such a disgrace to call urself part of tha hard four/ (four horsemen)

judgement day will come when u r in tha bathroom takin a shit, and u will die nameless, numberless, thoughtless, mindless, as well as hairless...so graph ur soul and prepare to go...it is finally here...

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hello????

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nice shit

this was good, your flow was easy to catch cos of ya short lines and you had decent wordplay happenin. If anything your verses were a little short, i would suggest adding more lines to each verse.

uppin...

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Yeah dog, nice shit on tha real.

can i please get some real feedback???

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you had a nice flow but wouldnt hurt to work on yer vocab a bit more

neways, it was a coo' drop dunny