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09-23-03, 09:24 PM
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Missin you! (Tell me wht you think)
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Missin You Babe!
Off to the army To serve for your country While I'm sittin at home Doin your laundry. Like tears fill my eyes Tears fill my heart Trying to hide all of these lies Man its to hard Can't deny it And no I didn't cheat It ain't my style C'mon I read from the bible. What am I to do Splitsoul Gravity took over I'm paying my toll I found my four leaf clover It's like some play, I'm apart of the cast I'm fallin in love But puttin on an act. My heart should be ice In a hot summer day Cuz son it's 'melting' for you From your awesome 'rays' The days are getting shorter Soon you will return Hope in all of this There is something we both learn I'm missin you terribly We both know it's true If you don't Get a fuckin clue You won my heart Everyone can vouch Your at the top of my chart. Now I can sit on my couch I can relax I told you the facts What can i do Nothing because I love you |
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09-23-03, 10:19 PM
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yo that was pretty damn good. it was obvious the emotion and feelings were there which i like. the vocab was ok, but the wordplay was good. the flow was pretty constant throughout the post. overall that was a good post girl, just keep postin and elevatin.
yo can u please return the favor? http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81167 thanx peace..... |
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09-24-03, 05:17 PM
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uppin............................................. .................................................. .................................................. ........
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09-24-03, 05:42 PM
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this was a alright peice, your flow was alright, you vocab was pretty good, and your wordplay was good too i thought, it was a good peice to read, overall it was a good peice, keep dropping.
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09-24-03, 07:28 PM
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nice piece, good vocab, emotion was there, u had a great flow, but no like 3 word lines, expand them to more complex, indepth about your feelings, in all its a good piece for someone new to the site, g'luck
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10-02-03, 10:07 PM
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uppin............................................. .................................................. .................................................. .....
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10-02-03, 10:46 PM
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uppin............................................. .................................................. .................................................. ........
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10-03-03, 08:23 AM
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Middle Weight
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Damn, u got skillz, babe. Keep droppin like this. O and check out "4th Period... Bored... Again..." I just wrote it to write it. holla back.
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10-03-03, 08:35 AM
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Masquarading 4 U
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alright peace, emotion full of it, and it was entertainin'.......................liked it, it was good, but flow was lil off, in my opinion...............still ill though
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10-04-03, 01:33 PM
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uppin............................................. .................................................. .................................................. ............
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10-04-03, 01:40 PM
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Girl reminds me of my peeps over seas fighting......
I loved this work of art. LOOK FOR IT MURDA_MISTRESS DROPS IN OPEN MIC 10/6/03 |
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10-04-03, 01:42 PM
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uppin........................................ Thanks for the feedback.............................
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10-05-03, 03:30 AM
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10-05-03, 04:48 PM
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10-05-03, 05:09 PM
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stop upping this
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