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Old 10-05-03, 02:11 AM   #1
e.coli
Can u beat me?..Hell No
 
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FREESTYLE (feed back appreicated)

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yo my nigga dont come at me like you hard give yo pussy a shave/
im gonna make like dmx and jet-li and cradle you to your grave/

dont try to hate me nigga haters just get off my dick/
befo i leave you broke and in a splint like a bootleg mike vick/

nigga i know you on my nuts with me you have a fasination/
get on my bad side and ill be standin over you at yo assassination/

tryin to battle me is just stupid simply put its not smart/
ill leave you empty handed like you got caught tryin to steal from k-mart/

like mcdonalds i love to see bitches smile ive been doin this for awhile/
this is my last bar i am done wit my lil freestyle/

please give me some feedback on this. dont sleep
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Old 10-05-03, 02:25 AM   #2
Kwik
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not bad, just seems a little slow. You kind of deliver it the same though. Good ideas though
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Old 10-05-03, 02:25 AM   #3
Speek.E.Z.
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it was alright.. your lines were very simple and you need more word play and try not to end freestyles with this is my last line so im done.. its just a big ass filler.. its alrigght you got some potential just keep on slanging.. but u need to elevate a bit first ..
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Old 10-05-03, 01:42 PM   #4
e.coli
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thanks for the feedback my niggas. holla

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