You must hate my guts if you dislike conceit//
I don't hate on wack shit, i give it precise critiques//
Every coin got 2-sides, don't judge me by one of mines//
A General, but I get muddy wit' my troops on the front line//
Battlin' setbacks and diminishing faith//
Summon whatever strentgh I can to finish this race//
Now in days nobody likes who the f@ck they are//
F@ck the next man, just be who the f@ck you are//
Put the gear in reverse just to pass you twice//
Only thing a hoe could give me is braggin' rights//
I'm the truth, hook me to a polygrapgh and test me//
What i got to prove? i paid my dues, i'm debt-free//

let me get some feedback...

its aight... could use a lil more to make the flow right,
but looks like you got the greater aspect of what goes
into a good verse... only thing I could tell ya, is... time
and practice makes perfect...
A.T.

it flowed alright, but overasll it was too basic, you should introduce some multis and maybe abit of word play, but seeing as its ya first post, i cant really say too much, you havn,t gained any experience yet. also it,s a bit short

...................................peace!!!!!!

Yeah this wasnt that bad...like was said before try some multies...and use some internals to help support the flow...try wordplay too...the structure was alright, could be a little better...but it was a ok piece...it was basic...but keep elevating...keep at it..and keep dropping.

room for elevation

lacked in a good amount of areas

keep spittin and keep elevatin

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yeah this was an aight piece just try an get some word play in yo rhymes to make it flow a lil better. keep elevatin nigga.

holla at yo boi
~1~