U tune in for a g viewer discretion advise/
Now i'm abou't to turn this whole place upside down/
As i awake from my sleeping slumber clutching my glock/
Taken the sock wipe my dick from busting out all this white shit/ Bitch you should have known we can only be friends/
No in between me and you will be a sin again/
I can't believe so many niggaz want me dead/
Forget abou't rewards niggaz doing this to make me scared/
My plan to kill'em all make'em dissapear/
My hands holding the key rather you fucking live/
I come again in prison out of these gates of hell/
Flames coming behind me burning the whole world/
It's the truth in my words nothing is left to say/

i wasnt really feelin that shit, work on rhymes and flows

your flows were weak
keep on postin you'll get better

^^u guys r gay, but anywho that was ok for a newb, ur vocab and wordplay was a little weak, so u should elevate a little on that, ur flow fell off at times during that post, and ur content and topic were a little played, keep droppin though, u got potential.

peace......

it was straight dog try to use multis
and flow, structure was ok though
keep postin

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flow was off....easy way to check is just say each line out loud...
word choise was not 2 well...find other ways of saying things..
example: hat cap cover headgear helmet

if you would be so kind
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=85236