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10-28-03, 01:45 AM | #1 | |
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Not Sure !!unfinished!!
IP:
im aggravated and aggitated, moms glad-i-made-it, its too bad- your-faded, from my mind evaded, through time-i-skated, too fast ive stated//
that my life just flew-by, with nothin to do and i knew-why, cause i lacked tha motivation from bein too-high, no askin you-why// i realize my mistakes, but it really takes a man to realize what it- takes, to put on tha brakes, and slow down to aknowledge ya fate// real-life and still-i cant find tha will but i still-try, so one day i will-fly to another place where my will-dies// lies cant be told, outlined bold, print, scent of aloe vera and mint, sprint to tha nearest vent, bow down upon your knees and start to repent, your spent// drug addiction, thugs bitchin about there love-of-fiction. but tha snow u sniffin acounts for tha sudden-twitchin....... |
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10-28-03, 09:24 AM | #2 | ||
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IP:
thought it was structured alright, and some good multis, and your flow was on point except for the second last bar, which seemed stretched compared to the rest, but i just wasn't feelin it,....peace!
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10-28-03, 07:32 PM | #3 | |
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IP:
well if you dont like it then give constructive sriticism on how it could be better but its not finished.uppin^^^
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