verse 30min after check in


10-12 bars
no cock rydin votes
and just keep it real

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You didn’t think precisely, judging me as an easy target for a win//
I’m blessed with a talent, that’s quite, bizarre, n radioactive, getting underneath your skin//
Un-leasing technical word play that leads your mind a-stray//
Shit if I thought I was battling you, I would of put my pen n pad away//

It’s un-real to see you stepping to something you’ll lose//
We can end this easy, with, a “surrender” or a “beating” shit, you chose….//
When buckling up your shoes, you should keep ya head high//
For you have just asked for a bruise, right underneath ya eye//

Now I’m on the 3rd bar, laughing with a cackle//
Laughing at your scar, you suffered from this battle//
Lyrics launched like a shuttle, fast n furious//
Some one fetch his rattle, before his ass gets delirious//

This is serious shit that I drop for you to inhale//
Like a mysterious myth, I’m fresh, your stale//
I’ll grab you by the tail and drop you with a “bang”//
“You’ll win this battle?” better chance joining the Klux klutz klang (spelling y’all haha)

Now I’m too the 5th with a grin across my face//
I’ve made your ass a myth, jumping to first place//
Not a trace of your elements could ever be identified//
Better feel the turbulence, when my spits n your head collide//

Watch me stand on top of you, with my head full of pride//
I’ve actually coruscated you, leaving your ass deprived//
Eventually you’ll admit it, I beaten you with charisma//
You’re ass is gone …. Not that we’ll miss ya…//

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Proclaimed to the name 'IgnoRance'
from illness 'DeliVerence'

thanks a lot of fuckin lines wtf, anyway this shit is boring! and since 1liner is not responding i'd say 1 line verses are out of the question

Nigga, we on Bars not fuckin Lines, and yea it may be fuckin borin to yo'w ass, but what do u know? Fuck all. Fuckin hatin on this shit.. Bitch!

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Proclaimed to the name 'IgnoRance'
from illness 'DeliVerence'

four lines ain't a bar dog. aight............................................. .................................................. .................................................. ....................

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Realest~Rap(5-0)
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whiteRwrong(5-0)

Shit i forgot bout this


Yo

you so wack i forgot about this call out thread/ Fuck what u said
I''l leave you dead/ will a Hollow-Head / when you swollow lead

Peeps see Me Vs You & they know you gunna get stepped on
So dont (Up) this shit if it gets slepped on

cuz you only Uppin ya losses-----X marks the the spot
so i dot where tha hair crosses/ and leave ya hips topless

Fuck.......... i'm tryin to spit some wack lines to make this even/
but his level so low That --Fuck...........i cant see em

Leave ya aborted like an extored shortage/ you cummin up shorted cuz u can't pay ya skills they morgage/

Who know who care i don't care boiut written no more
all yall know this aint even close to my worst this is just dumb why i gotta battle this dude

set this wasnt a battle verse.....you had very few punches, it flowed very nicely, but made no sense at all...what liner's verse lacked in sturcture it made up for in punches
I break it down like this:

flow - set -- important in a battle rhyem, but difficult to assign a position, it affects everything....which set had a better flow, but no punches, or any of the other top categories

punches - liner -2nd most important category

sturcture - set 7th, good punches make up for poor sturcture

creativity - set 6th most important

vocab - set, althoguh ive seen alot of those words form u b4 an di think abotu 3 of those lines are recycled

Disses - liner - 1st most important category

metas - set 5th

opener - liner - 3rd most important category

closer - set 4th most important


overall sets verse was better, and if this was pure rhyming, jsu judging the rap, id vote set

but thsi is a battle, liner came at you harder, dissed u harder and better....u didnt realy dis him, jus recycled words and lines, the ones u thinka re u best.....set u can rhyme, but u can't battle, u came close but jus lacked too mcuh in disses and punches, it was realyl a close battle, porlly set's best yet, but liner took it


vote liner

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1Liner Take My Name Outta Your Sig.
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Oh, The Irony

NwPirrelivance: peyo is the worst rapper ever
NwPirrelivance: lmao
Me: yes lol
NwPirrelivance: did you hear his audio?
Me: no..is as bad as fiori's
NwPirrelivance: worse
NwPirrelivance: i cant find it
NwPirrelivance: but its bad
Me: damn i wanted a laugh
NwPirrelivance: i could do a better audio with my text, the sound of me typing would be doper than his audio

If he merked you than you should stay in this sig....

And dawgs.... I aint readin a book..... 12 freakin bars.... hah....

noone wants to read that much

peep this shit
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=93075

yea that shit is madd long

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Dumb Fuck,

My Record Is 0-0 I Have No Losses

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Oh, The Irony

NwPirrelivance: peyo is the worst rapper ever
NwPirrelivance: lmao
Me: yes lol
NwPirrelivance: did you hear his audio?
Me: no..is as bad as fiori's
NwPirrelivance: worse
NwPirrelivance: i cant find it
NwPirrelivance: but its bad
Me: damn i wanted a laugh
NwPirrelivance: i could do a better audio with my text, the sound of me typing would be doper than his audio

DAMN that shit was way to long but i gotta give it up to 1Liner he got my vote cuz his shit didnt take a long time to read and he had good punches, but set you had a dope verse to but it was to long

VOTE-1Liner

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It wont be the same since we touchin the game,
Make the hardest thug in your crew tuck in his chane,
You think this shits a game and im bluffin for fame?
Ill squeeze off this tech till nothin remains

Latest win-Wiggadave 5-0 KO

<center><marquee behavior=scroll direction="left"scrollamount="5"><font size="5" color=red>.:NUCLEAR CONCEPTS:.
We are the worlds most dangerous niggas alive,
All of my niggas bang with us and lets ride </marquee></center>

hit this back with an honest vote

*****ONE*****

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=93471

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It wont be the same since we touchin the game,
Make the hardest thug in your crew tuck in his chane,
You think this shits a game and im bluffin for fame?
Ill squeeze off this tech till nothin remains

Latest win-Wiggadave 5-0 KO

<center><marquee behavior=scroll direction="left"scrollamount="5"><font size="5" color=red>.:NUCLEAR CONCEPTS:.
We are the worlds most dangerous niggas alive,
All of my niggas bang with us and lets ride </marquee></center>

Both Verses where wack as hell. Maybe they should re-write better ones. But I say that I Liner took it. To bad I cant vote yet.

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