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11-22-03, 11:19 AM | #1 | |
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Life?
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~Please everyone who reads this, don't read a couple lines and say o its good. I was going through something when i wrote this and i really spilled me emotions out on tha paper, so please if your going to read this read it from begining to end~
The essence of life astounds me in all different ways. But what is the true meaning of life? What's it all about? It is just to have fun and have no worries? Is it to simply be nice to people until you go to heaven? Or is life here, for us to live in a worlds of pain and sorrow,to suffer the hardships of broken friendship and love? To give us pain, to threaten us for no reason at all? What is the point of it all? Life is like an empty book waiting for us to fill in the details. But then someone comes along and burns your whole story, your life, your exact purpose for which we live in this chaotic place called earth. When you're feeling your best, like nothing can go wrong, someone strikes down on you and takes away all you've worked hard for. Someone comes into your brain and deletes all your happy thoughts... Why is life like this? What is the point of it all? Life is like a candle light, just waiting to be blown out. They stock you night and day.They are there to make your life miserable amd the only person who truly loves them is god. You want to thrive them till they corrupt so they can't hurt you anymore, But you can't. You can't stop these fiends whos whole purpose is to ruin your life. Because this creature who is put on earth for one reason to make your life a living nightmare...IS YOUR OWN LIVING SELF. Tell me waht you think....uppin on this rite here |
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11-22-03, 11:20 AM | #2 | |
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IP:
Sorry about the lil spaces between lines and stuff yall. My comp wacked it up.
uppin |
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11-22-03, 11:36 AM | #3 | |
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You sound like you were confused and a little depressed when you wrote this, I don't know. I couldn't really get into it. Keep doin your thing
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11-22-03, 11:44 AM | #4 | |
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Aight thanks for the honest feedback.
Uppin.... |
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11-22-03, 01:11 PM | #5 | |
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DONT SLEEP ON DIS PLZ UPPIN
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11-22-03, 02:47 PM | #6 | |
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IP:
This was a great drop. One problem, ur only allowed 2 on the front page. Watch that next time. Back to this...this was a great piece. you put a lot of emotion and thought into this. The structure was a lil off, but it turned out iight. I liked ur analysis on your view of life. You did a great job of expressing your ideas and feelings. It had a nice twist at the end, making it as if that evil person that you spoke of was yourself. Overall I loved it. Great job. Keep it up. Most respect.
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11-22-03, 02:54 PM | #7 | |
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Ayoo this is ~the prophiit~ i jsut got this name back i forgot the pass but got it now so i will be on this name from now on.
Thx for the response angel and sry anyone for the confusion... |
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11-22-03, 09:22 PM | #8 | |
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IP:
hey yo...just uppin to tell you that i really liked this and to keep writing
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