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11-26-03, 06:05 AM
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Masquarading 4 U
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Open woundz
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7470#post937470
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7471#post937471 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7473#post937473 WHAT I'VE REPLIED TO^^^^^^^^^^ My open woundz bleed arsenic...Poisonous Fumes engage Filled with a rage...Spit the blood from my woundz upon the page My life span fade'z as the walls of my lungz begin to cave But look deeper in the wayz...Only got Myself to blame Breathe in the deadly elixer...My Salvation comes Quicker No longer the pain eats me away...20 million times sicker Than I was before,Unable to ignore the call of the darkside My Mind state'z Hard to find,Left behind,Sittin in corner,Tries to hide I'll find, the way my Sanity'z playin tricks, Cold hits like brickz Visions of myself bein burnt Joan Of Ark style,on a crusifix It'z got a hold of my soul and It'll never let go,not never I can't rest Til me and The lost are back together
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11-26-03, 06:18 AM
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IP:
this was short but sweet... ur flow was on point, you had some hot vocabulary... work on the multi's though....
My open woundz bleed arsenic...Poisonous Fumes engage Filled with a rage...Spit the blood from my woundz upon the page I'll find, the way my Sanity'z playin tricks, Cold hits like brickz Visions of myself bein burnt Joan Of Ark style,on a crusifix ^^^ i loved those lines ^^^ you seem to be hiding the true meaning of something deeper... but nonetheless, this was a very nice piece.... peace 8/10 |
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11-26-03, 07:47 AM
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thanx mate....feedbak
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11-26-03, 10:03 AM
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IP:
That was hot. short and to the point. good vocab. keep droppin.
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11-26-03, 01:55 PM
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IP:
i love drops that aren't too long, real nice, loved it man
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11-27-03, 07:26 AM
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IP:
uppin
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11-27-03, 07:27 AM
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IP:
good day old chat, nice rap.
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11-27-03, 07:28 AM
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Masquarading 4 U
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IP:
Thanx
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11-27-03, 11:35 AM
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IP:
Hot short and to the point rhyme keep doin what u doin
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11-27-03, 04:11 PM
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IP:
Yeah man this was pretty good....it was short but it made a good read i thought.....you structured it pretty well....Your vocab was good doesnt need up'd really at all....the flow to this was alright got off a bit i thought but nothing big....overall this was a good piece.
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