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--Why Lie--(First piece here)
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Decon Snakeyes Chronic G .... .... . . Chorus Day By Day,Stealing Food Looking For A Roof To Sleep Under Just Trying To Get By Everyone Makes Mistakes,My Life Somewhat Revovles Around Porno,I'm Just A Guy..1 Dreams Of Making It Since I Was A Tod,Just A Regular Guy,I'm Not Below God.. Where To Go From Here I'm Not Sure,I Don't Go To Church But People Think I'm A Sinner..2 People Say I Don't Have Good People Skills I'm Shy,Everyday I Wonder If I'm Gonna Die.. No Matter What People Don't Think I Try,But My Main Qestion For People Is Why Lie?..3 Verse One Student By Day Emcee By Night,I Don't Brag Nor Think My Raps Are Fat.. Get Inspiration From Tracks,What Goes Beyond This Broken Home And Gats..1 All I Know Is Pain,I Try To Make Something Out Of Life But It Seems The Same.. Living Life In Fast Lane,Work Twords A Demo As If My Way Out Is Fame..2 Don't Hear A Sound,I Loose Battles I Try To Act Bright But My Head's Down.. I Try To Find Time To Come To Church,Can God Finally Help Me Now..3 Don't Matter What It Takes,I Just Want To Finally Touch That Chrome.. But I Begin To Wonder How Far Can I Really Go With This Broken Home?..4 Chest Fully Engraved With Bullet Holes My Time To Enter The Grave I Lay.. God Can You Please Give This To Me?..All I Want Is To See A Better Day..5 Chorus Day By Day,Stealing Food Looking For A Roof To Sleep Under Just Trying To Get By Everyone Makes Mistakes,My Life Somewhat Revovles Around Porno,I'm Just A Guy..1 Dreams Of Making It Since I Was A Tod,Just A Regular Guy,I'm Not Below God.. Where To Go From Here I'm Not Sure,I Don't Go To Church But People Think I'm A Sinner..2 People Say I Don't Have Good People Skills I'm Shy,Everyday I Wonder If I'm Gonna Die.. No Matter What People Don't Think I Try,But My Main Qestion For People Is Why Lie?..3 (repeat 2x) Verse Two The Qestion Is..What Do You People Want From Me?..I've Got Nothing To Give.. But People Want Me Dead,So I Guess All I Will Ever Be Is A Mere Remberence..1 God Maybe Life Has Finally Turned Good Or Is This A Temparary High?... Cause I'm Just A Mere Fool Of A Man,A Emcee Trying To Make Something Out Of A Fool's Life..2 Will I Die When?..After My Mom Did Pills..This Shit's Getting To Me My Feelings Are Torn.. My Parents Never Told Me The Good Of Life,Maybe I Wasen't Ready For This War..3 Love,Sex,Money,Girls,Greed Is This What Life Really Truely Is? Tick Tock,The Bomb On The Inside Is About To Explode No Time To Defuse..4 EveryDay I've Dreams Of Ending Up Dead In A AlleyWay Probably Getting Shot.. With The Way Life Is Going,I'll End Up Like Jesus Dying On The Fucking Cross!!..5 Chorus Day By Day,Stealing Food Looking For A Roof To Sleep Under Just Trying To Get By Everyone Makes Mistakes,My Life Somewhat Revovles Around Porno,I'm Just A Guy..1 Dreams Of Making It Since I Was A Tod,Just A Regular Guy,I'm Not Below God.. Where To Go From Here I'm Not Sure,I Don't Go To Church But People Think I'm A Sinner..2 People Say I Don't Have Good People Skills I'm Shy,Everyday I Wonder If I'm Gonna Die.. No Matter What People Don't Think I Try,But My Main Qestion For People Is Why Lie?..3 (repeat 2x) Uppin this 1 |
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this was tight the flow was a bit hard to follow for me but the overall theme and expressiveness reminded me of some old wu type shit you came off pretty clean nice rhyme scheme and all.
if ya got a chance peep my thread in here-1 |
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I really liked this piece, it was nicley written. I think audio for this would be pretty dope. Try to space out your lines a little more so it might be easier to read, other than that it was nice.. looking forward to hearing more from you!
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It was straight
Chorus was aight, coulda used small adjustments verses was straight, good rhyme scheme overall song not too bad though .................................................. ................ |
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This was pretty good i thought....good read....but structure wise your lines were kinda stretched out there, just watch that, dont make them so long like that but it was still good though....flow was pretty good i thought, got off at a few spots but nothing big really...but overall this was a pretty good piece...keep at it.
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Uppin for more...
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yo i liked it but i think the chorus was kinda hard to read
also not many punchlines a few multis but it was still all good homie just watch how long you strecth out the bars i also seem to have this prob. ~1~ |
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It Was A Open Mic/Written Not A Diss To AnyOne.So Theres Not Suposed To Be Any Punchlines,lol 1 |
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Uppin For More
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A King Missing a Queen...
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This was straight, had a consistant flow. Pretty nice rhyme scheme, could use a little work on vocab. But it was a nice read, It felt confortable going with. Pretty good for a first drop... 7 / 10
--> return the favor and peep the flow in my sig... aight hommie... OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion
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^Thanks For The Love,
It'd Be Cool If You Could Also Drop A Vote In My Battle In The Front Lines.. |
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that was a nice Open Mic.....Not Much Wrong With It...it Flowe Nicely.....I Enjoyed the Read But it was Long I DOn't Really Care......But I thik Ya Chorus was too Long But allround........7/10 nice drop kepp it Comin Kuz Peace (v)
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I was feeling I can tell it was from the heart
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Uppin
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Ohhh Jeff There U Go Again,
I Love This Shyt Mayne, You REally Should Record This Shyt |
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