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12-13-03, 03:27 PM | #1 | ||
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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS: The Rebelion PT. 3- KAZE
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replied to: ROBO, RULE, AND WORD~P.
(THIS IS DONE BACK IN THE PRESENT TIME OF PART 1, 2099) THIS IS DONE THROUGH THE EYES OF KURIO KAZE. kaze stands in the bar with a silent crowd the roar of years past echoes so loud that he nearly drowns in sea of reminicing flahes of battle rapping, time's that he's been missing he recollets in 2060 hvs had his back when they staged the coup forming a two-prong attack hvs to shut the power down, kaze to rush security but when kaze got there, electric defenses were sill armed and ready "Where HVS at?" he though as laser blasts killed comrades so Kaze retreated with only a fourth of what he had still alive, his eyes took in the extermination of friends and decided once again "Fancy C has to end" so he went to Japan and began digging through archives fortunately his knowledge of japanese still survived when he found a text hundreds of years old still preserved because it was sealed in gold boldy, he cracked the case and leafed through the pages a light streamed out and it felt like his bones were blazing afterwards he looked into the mirror, it was amazing his youth was restored but he was better than ever before a mere flick of the wrist went right through an iron door his agility increased, his mc fluidity on another level than any previous mc he could hide words on the wind and battle rap from a mile off so opponents would be dead before they could even cough using his newfound powers he travelled to new york and raided one of c's compounds he tore the place apart and at the end he finally found a lock box stocked full of old mc chains as he began leafing through them he recognized the old names no limit, cash money, death row, aftermath, and then he realized that each of these was an appropriate shuriken the diamond edges would cut c's troops in half plus he couldn't resist killing with an ironic attack from the past after that he began touring the club scene where he was now faced with ending c's regime all this thought within the blink of an eye as he faced remix, saw the mic in his hand, and smiled...
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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS- DA ILLEST CREW Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/ So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S. |
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12-13-03, 03:30 PM | #2 | ||
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IP:
UPPIN^^^
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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS- DA ILLEST CREW Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/ So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S. |
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12-13-03, 03:43 PM | #3 | ||
Flyweight
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IP:
uppin.
cmon people dont sleep on this.
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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS- DA ILLEST CREW Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/ So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S. |
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12-13-03, 05:39 PM | #4 | ||
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IP:
GODDAMN QUIT SLEEPIN ON THIS MUTHAPUCKAS.
SHIT ALL YOU GOTTA DO IS SAY WHAT YOU THOUGHT ABOUT IT. IS THAT REALY THAT HARD, FUCK.
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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS- DA ILLEST CREW Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/ So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S. |
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12-13-03, 05:50 PM | #5 | |
This is my first post!
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lol i liked it - alot actually, all ur Rebelion shit is tight..
pz
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Reppin NUCLEAR CONCEPTS Grimey - Records |
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12-13-03, 05:52 PM | #6 | |
Banned: Permanent
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IP:
Rebellion is Kinda Played in my view
But you handled it nicely.. just work on it and everything |
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12-13-03, 05:53 PM | #7 | |
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IP:
nice imagry and concept, i aint read a rhyme set in the future.
could structure, nice wodplay and sounded like it could be an audio piece. keep that shit up. hit my rhyme http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98014 cheers |
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12-13-03, 07:13 PM | #8 | ||
1E
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IP:
yeah quite liked this drop...liked the concept, even if it was a bit played...ya still executed it ok...so...yeah not bad man...liking it....pZ...keep reppin....
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12-13-03, 07:22 PM | #9 | ||
Word.
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IP:
Yeah i agree this was a pretty good drop here....structure in this was pretty good overall i thought.....flow in this was good, stayed on pretty well through out it as i read through it...this made a good read...overall a good piece....keep at it.
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12-13-03, 08:26 PM | #10 | ||
Flyweight
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IP:
TY FOR THE FEEDBACK ON THIS.
SEE IT ANT THAT HARD TO REPLY NOW IS IT PEOPLE SO QUIT SLEEPING.
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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS- DA ILLEST CREW Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/ So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S. |
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12-13-03, 08:55 PM | #11 | ||
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IP:
good work and i like how u started out on a great verse
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12-13-03, 09:08 PM | #12 | ||
..Soft Focus..
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IP:
great work mayn...your flow was on point i thought very well done. you had some good lines for a very used topic...but you stayed on point and had a good story line good job return the favour
Hit this battle up with an honest vote http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...?threadid=98612
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Open Mics The Weathers Art http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673 My Teenage Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850 Secluded http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851 Open Your Eyes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461 |
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12-13-03, 09:25 PM | #13 | |
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IP:
real good story telling i felt the hwole story telling good deptth in the content good rhyme scheme could use a little more internals or multis but overall it was a real good read
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12-13-03, 10:40 PM | #14 | ||
Flyweight
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IP:
thx for the feedback my niggas.
keep it comin. part 4 will be out tommorow. peace.
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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS- DA ILLEST CREW Niggas we dont work with tecks, we work with BOMB threats/ So fuck with us and i'll have WORD aim FAT BOY 2 at you and your whole set/- S.S. |
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12-13-03, 11:08 PM | #15 | ||
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IP:
this piece was raw... flow was coo so was vocab
structure was ight peep my new open |
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