10 lines/ 5 bars

blindspit, drop verses w/i 30min

house rules
no hate or unexplained votes

!ONLY VOTERS PLZ!

check in and I'll drop soon

One


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A'ight, check check checkin in...haha......................................... ................................................

Check it...

Tryin' a new structure...

Yo, Jan 1st, gave life ta this queer/ But he ain' tha betta part of tha New Year*//

Nigga, ya ryhmez are festive/ I swallow em whole witout chewin, like they digestive//

Men spring this fuckaz erection/ Ya record 0-1 is a horrible firs' impression//

Ya like tha penis long like a salamander/ Ima destroy ya shi', like I was "Master and Commander"//

Ya, I guess 'n repeat** ya location/ Ya a poor-ass citizen, dyin' from starvation//

Ya, you Raw 'n Uncut***/ 'Cause ya boyfrien' hasn' punctured ya ass, but ya futa job is a buttslut//

If ya though' ya could beat me, ya heart decieved/ A merk from me, is a gift well recieved****//

Ima spray ya wit "hurb"-icide/ Defeat you, spit on you, 'n watch ya commit suicide...//

*He was born on January 1st
**His location says Guess 'n Repeat
***Look at his Sig
****It's an honor ta recieve a merkin' from me


Waitin on u dawg...

I Know U Gettin Snow Up N Canada But Dont Let Ya Brain Freeze-
Cuz Im Spittin Heat W/breeze, While U Killin Yo'Self On Skis- prof.
Wigga Pleaze Get Linkin Park Cuz N This Part Im Gettin Dark-
U'll B A Rappin Quadraped, Vocab Rippin Ya Limbs Apart-
Shit This Verbal Laundering, Checkmate, U just a Pawn, G-
I Twist Ya Heart, Like Wet Towels, U Get Sent To The Laundry-*
Yer a 50/50 guy, Not 50 Cent, But You Do Like "Many Men"-
Break da Henny Jab U in Yo Skinny Chin, U Just A Citi-Zen-
Abeyin My Law U Got 'Dick-N-Da-Jaw Awe', Call Me Twelve-
For Ya Record N 4 The Time Taken To Wreck Ya Wit Shells-

Aight Dawg

*Mob term, for gettin murked

Hmm...
Much elevation room for both of you..
Work on using more metas and clever hard hitting punches
Sex Lines are played-- Never use those..
Never use "s //s or any other symbol

Freebase took this one with better flow and harder hitting punches

Although it was close

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98955

^ Use structure similar to that.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98955

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Respect is all I'm after.
Prime effort is all you can expect.
Perfection will be promised in time.

The Creation

A'ight thx fo honesty, UPPIN(1).......................................... .................................................. ................

like token said... too many sex jokes.... but one was funny with tha impression shit....
i liked frees laundry punch but ... im gonna hve to go with gangsta one...more consistant

vote-gangsta one....

hit this up plz....i took tha time...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98986

I think both verses had some nice punches, i wasn't really feeling Gangsta Ones personals though!! I'd have to give this too Freebase because he was more consistant and had the better punches!! Both flows were a bit choppy so i'd say that was a tie here!!

Keep elevating!!

K.O.S

A'ight, thx fo ya honesty, UPPIN(2) This shi' bein slept on................................................ .................................................. .....

Fuckin' bein SLEPT ON! UPPIN(3)^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

I don' fuckin' believe this...FUCIN' UPPIN(4)^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

uppin for honest votes
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Wat he said...........UPPIN(Final)^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^^^^^^^^

i'm a break it down...
flow...i didn't like the new structure kinda fucked your flow so i give it to freebase..no hate..
punches..you both had em freebases didn't really...rhyme...i onno i gonna give this one to gangsta..one..
personals...goes to gangsta i don't think freebase had any..call me crazy...
opener...goes to freebase...
closer......gangsta one .....no hate
one love i'll poll it if its still open when i get a 100 my vote gangsta.,.

Honest Opinion

Punchlines - none
Wordplay - none
structure - Freebase
flow - Freebase
rhyme scheme - Gangsta 1ne
personals - Gangsta 1ne
opener - Gangsta 1ne
closer - Gangsta 1ne
creativity - Gangsta 1ne

overall - Gangsta 1ne

yes...gangsta you still need to work on the flow of things, your gettin there..you was still pritty aiight and dominated your opponent, but lesson-be-learned..the flow needs work a little more..good props to both emcees.