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PHOENIIX: jury, please witness our first line of evidence for the prosecution of the known herb "mc phoenix."
he is guilty for imitation, wackness, stupidity, and most importantly recycling.

MC Phoenix vs. Illeynice
MC Phoenix vs. Dizzy Hommel



METERS: notice how both of his verses were exactly same. 'mc phoenix' is the purest form of an idiot...he failed to follow the--

PHOENIIX: --YOU STOLE MY NAME MOTHAFUCKA! I WANTED MY PINK SLIP BATTLE FOR THE NAME BITCH! NOW YOURE FUCKED. CUZ I FOUND THIS SHIT WHEN I SEARCHED YOUR POSTS TO DISS YOU. FUCK A MC PHOENIX! I CHALLENGED YOU TO A PINK SLIP BATTLE YOU FUCKING PUSSY BUT YOU WERE TO SCARED YOU FUCKIN--

METERS: --calm down phoeniix. its okay. we can humiliate him here. and then he will be banned. this will all be over soon...

*MC* PHOENIX: oh no.......



METERS:

I'm gonna rhyme ‘till you defined by being skull fucked out ya mind,
Phoeniix gave you a shot to prove ya manhood: bitch declined,
I'm claimin' ya flesh as shoe leather, after you've been tarred and feathered,
So now it's like I'm walking on sunshine no matter the fucking weather,
Tried to elevate but ya tethered, so ya wackness is stagnant eternally,
Hear the banshee ‘cause ya "banned," or more accurately put "set free,"
Ya rhymes were an epiphany, like ya record split four and four,
Morbid curiosity equated ya battles to siamese twins at war,
Send this herb fudge packin' with a eulogy to mark his grave,
Paragone will concave any knave who even thinks to misbehave


PHOENIIX:

PARAGONE OPERATION 1: diss the fuck out a this imitator
im the real fuckin stealth bomber, u just a flight simulator
shit, this search on your name really did me much justice
cuz wit the results i found i'll get to rest my fists and quit punchin
jury, witness the degnereration of this nature loving child....
..he must love collectin cans....cuz this bitch just RECYCLED
fuck dude, i wanted to wreck you in a pink slip battle, man
but now we dont need the match, u already gonna get banned!
but if you dare come back wit another phoenix spoof, i'll induce a new brusing
you must fucking love losing...look at the shit youre re using!
damn paragone focusing on you, dont it feel like its your birthday?
take the MC out ya name and u couldnt be me on my worst day
now look, you'll undertand--this isnt wordplay....FUCK YOU--this herbs gay
why would you recycle a verse that wasnt ill in the first place!?!?
fuckin herb glued feathers on his arms and set himself on fire, tryin to imitate me
its over.you been exposed and will soon be banned...OPERATION 1: COMPLETE.




and the moral of the story is....

dont jack other people's names. and if you accidentally do, and find out someone had it first....then battle them for it. dont be a pussy about it. oh yeah dont recycle.

uppin this shit.......

should i report him to IR?

uppin so people can read this....

any replies???

it was alright.. try to make the lines more even, you had some awkward lines to, but you got your point across good stuff..

Best Lines:
PARAGONE OPERATION 1: diss the fuck out a this imitator
im the real fuckin stealth bomber, u just a flight simulator

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thanks...

uppin for some feed and exposure

...Hmmm...seems to be too focused on Vocab...maybe next time tone it down a bit...other than that...it was alright...^^

yo homie this was an aight flow.....u know....ur vocab was the best, then came ur wordplay n multis.......all u need to work on is structure.....overall its hot 7/10


peace

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i dont see a prob with line length the way i flow this blend nicely both were very solid and outside of some minor brushing up this was an excelltnet read

Yeah this was alright i thought...structure was ok, could use a touch up though...you had some good punches i though...had some personals...your vocab was real good....flow in this was alright i thought, kinda got off at some parts though...but overall this was alright...keep at it.

I dont say much on this site cuz I usually just like to read this shit for entertainment but I got to say that eventhough some work could be applied, y'all definitely put MC Phoenix in his place.....nice

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I'm gonna get you punch drunk from drinking the punch from the back of the lunch truck and it'd be some dumb luck if I called you a dumb fuck and you lost your footing and fell like you was me...a drunk duck! -Yung Native '03'

It was to weak, and you should have come all out with personals.
If you need anywhere to see that happen peep " Deacon Diss "
( ahh, still cant get over how hard I came back on him... LOL )

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This one was some good shit. You guys had some good punches uppin there. Structure's the only problem I saw. Other than that............ It was awsome.

uppin the thread?