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Max Payne (keystyle)
IP: 1E3A 659B
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...100#post1026100
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102020 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...096#post1026096 {Intro Story} I've cracked brains to leave my enemies thoughtless while I act insane Ever since my wife was slained I converted to the mercilous Max payne I've been dealt the hand of death, therefore I have nothing to lose Its kinda like Im grasping my own grave, the way Im clutching my dome I've played with death for years, so my soul is taking a gamble I use to be claimed top detective, the way I was breaking all scandle Now my contracts been released, and I'm a self proclaim free agent I'm bout to prance upon my prey until their face bleed's fragrant
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IP: 4577 CD9A
..Not bad..a little short..but..I guess that's why they call it yhe 'Intro...^^
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IP: 1E3A 659B
Yeah, my written is coming tommorrow. Will be way better than this keystyle....
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IP: 47B9 FD94
its aight, lil short, waiting to see the rest when its done.
feedback preciated,. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102059 |
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IP: 340D 8B8F
Yeah this was alright i thought....structure was alright in this....flow was alright, it stayed on point through the piece...didnt fall off really, some spots but very little....you had some good multies in there...but overall this was alright...keep at it.
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IP: C1DA C961
It was good. I would've liked to read more. But good piece
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It was a overall original decent flow, Had decent flow...I wanna see it when its finished...one
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IP: 1E3A 659B
Thanks guys for your comments.....
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IP: 5F2A E1C0
not bad.. i didn't know if this was about you or the
game tho.. lol specify on that shit. not bad for it being short.. i liked it, not bad hit it up http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=102145 |
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IP: 399E F0FD
uppin for any last minute feedback
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IP: DF7B C8F7
short, quite good though, you need to work on the legth of your rhymes
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IP: DF7B C8F7
again short....but vey nice..props indeed
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IP: C1DA C961
...Give You Props For Originality...
...Make Ya Lines Shorter... ...Plus, If You Gonna' Make This A "Written," Make This Rhyme... "I've been dealt the hand of death, therefore I have nothing to lose Its kinda like Im grasping my own grave, the way Im clutching my dome" |
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IP: DCA3 9EE6
nice. nice. very true to the video game.
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