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Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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Love Scar
IP: C1DA C961
Umm anyone who has been followin my poetry i apologize to constantly brood over this woman i called wife but using it to vent, my pure form will return soon....
Woman....give me a moment to say that again...woman..... my whimsical ode to a lady close to my heart, class matched only by her ass~ in the past i've dedicated my heart to others but my ways changed fast~ I loved you with my heart among other things put me in a frenzy~ walk with you holdin your back pocket and niggas sprout wit envy~ trapped in your enchanting eyes, an impeccable countenance has me locked~ but u didnt remain true tryna get through every dick on the block~ we exchanged i love you before but u turned me into a man lost~ soul bruised and abused i wanna see u wit your hands crossed~ i shouldnt say that but u cut me deeper than words can say~ cheated my queen and now i wanna make birds my prey~ i pray you'll return, so i wait like maidens whose men are at sea~ over the raging waters on a stormy cliff i want u to come to me~ but the torrential tears cascading down my cheeks pain they send~ You keep locked in your body a piece of my heart i'll never see again~ 1luv. |
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IP: C1DA C961
This was deep n i loved it. I can say i relate cause i felt like this b4 wit my b/f. There was madd emotion flowing thro this and great imagery. In a way...I'm speechless. Great job. Keep it up
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Flyweight
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IP: FA08 169D
your words have substance in this poem and what you said in it has good flow. from the first line to the last of the poem I saw that you consistently kept this flow and depth. Its unfortunate tho u gotta deal with women like that. i enjoyed.
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Ya shit is no competition like 'trucker hats' against some 'fitteds' nigga I'll fade u away like J's on the ballin court in a 'arcura' wit 'tinteds' -mindkontrol none yall niggas wanna see me... |
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IP: E2A5 7724
this piece wuz pretty deep i think
but.. a word of advice while writing a love poem avoid usin words such as "ass,niggas,dick,etc" |
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Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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IP: C1DA C961
^lol thank you for the feedback, keep em coming 1luv.
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