This was a really dope piece Mr.S...
I loved how you brought out the imagry..
Great flow..
These last 5 lines just caught me..
"i can envision the feelings it will create as hopeless
just like the snowless christmas i never celebrated
plus the new year came belated as demonstrated
filled with hatred in-complacent, the life we live in
class ends in two minutes, so go ahead and finish it"
Props for the whole piece..
Check this piece out please..I think I put a little something about you in it..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=106609

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Retarded people's heads are to big..I'll be back with something just as funny as watching the Special Olympics..don't worry..

Like Maven said before, You incorporated alot more multies than in alot of previous pieces. Personally, I saw this as a beautiful piece laced with many many metaphors and great flow. I can't ask more from a better piece. This seemed a little bit ehh, like it was more thrown together rather than taking the time to perfect it. But it was still a good piece nonetheless.

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